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Millennial King
(Sung to "*Return to Sender")
Posted a message from my mobile
hoped she would hit me back
Bright and early next mornin’
she blocked me from her site
I’ll blog about it
Return the favor
in a public forum
my baby done dissed me
now she’ll feel my scorn
we had been texting
occasionally we’d chat
she started fading
now totes ghosted my account
I tried to friend her on Facebook
she checks it frequently
and now her status reads “Taken”
she chose him over me
I’m sad about it
Return the favor
in a public forum
my baby done dissed me
now she’ll feel my scorn
Posted a message from my mobile
hoped she would hit me back
Bright and early next mornin’
she blocked me from her site
I’ll blog about it
Return the favor
in a public forum
my baby done dissed me
now she’ll feel my scorn
we had been texting
occasionally we’d chat
she started fading
now totes ghosted my account
I tried to friend her on Facebook
she checks it frequently
and now her status reads “Taken”
she chose him over me
I’m sad about it
Return the favor
in a public forum
my baby done dissed me
now she’ll feel my scorn
Author's Note
Thought I'd have some fun bringing a classic rock 'n' roll song into the 21st century.
NaPo/GloPo/WriMo 2020 #24
NaPo/GloPo/WriMo 2020 #24
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Re. Millennial King
25th Apr 2020 10:50am
this is fantastic lol
I love the humor and how you captured living in social media.
how heartbreaks feel bigger than what it seem drawing so much attention.
Who knew soap operas would give birth to public online dramas lol
well done GW :)
I love the humor and how you captured living in social media.
how heartbreaks feel bigger than what it seem drawing so much attention.
Who knew soap operas would give birth to public online dramas lol
well done GW :)
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Re: Re. Millennial King
26th Apr 2020 00:05am
Perfect description, online, personalized soap operas. I am glad you like the piece and that you found humor in my words and hopefully my song. I appreciate very much your friendship and all you've taught about poetry, Sensei.
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Anonymous
25th Apr 2020 9:29pm
Was I supposed to laugh?
I was cracking up like a goodun’ 👀
Thanks for the lighthearted humour here. Much needed.
-M
I was cracking up like a goodun’ 👀
Thanks for the lighthearted humour here. Much needed.
-M
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Re: Re. Millennial King
26th Apr 2020 7:21am
You, most definitely, supposed to laugh, that was my primary intention for writing the piece. I am elated that you read, listened to this, I was hoping you might do so. My Elvis needs some work, next time Ill wear the white, one piece, sequinned jump suit to set the mood and channel better His Majesty.🙏💞
Re. Millennial King
26th Apr 2020 11:33pm
Haha! This is tight work. I love the tongue in cheek vibe and the audio is great.
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Re: Re. Millennial King
27th Apr 2020 2:12am
Thank you Daniel it was a blast to prepare. I am glad you thought it humorous. Took me awhile to get the audio somewhat synched with the appearance of the words.
Re. Millennial King
Oh how you made made me laugh at the unadulterated content shared on social media.... that we watch like a trainwreck! Clever as always too. I've missed reading and seeing you. And now I've heard you too! Pandy hugs!♥️
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Re: Re. Millennial King
28th Apr 2020 1:22am
Thank you Pandy❣❣ A Pandy hug is something I will not more willingly accept and return. I am glad the piece made you laugh and that you saw it's social significance. ,🙏😍😘
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28th Apr 2020 3:01am
Re. Millennial King
1st May 2020 11:09am
This is amazing. I’m going tonaooteciate your humor so much! Thank you for recommending I check this out!
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Re: Re. Millennial King
1st May 2020 4:02pm
Yes, call me Señor Tonetician...I love "tonaooteciate" I'll have to incorporate it into a poem❣❣ 🤩
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1st May 2020 4:13pm
Re. Millennial King
10th Jul 2020 9:31pm
Love the humor in this and of course the inclusion of empire of evil; social media. Also the audio portion was a great addition.
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Re: Re. Millennial King
10th Jul 2020 11:17pm
Thank you so much Kristina! I had AN absolute blast doing this one and ubiquitous social media and our tendency to be bolder when covered by the web which is indeed often a web of deceit.
Re. Millennial King
hahahaha 😂.... you are hysterical...
"totes ghosted my account"...
OMG... I died laughing here.
.... and couldn't stop.
VERY CUTE!!!
and soooo clever
Of course it is, from BB
I expect it to be ahhhhmazing!! 👍🏻
Loved it - 💙
🎶 🎤🎵
xoxo
"totes ghosted my account"...
OMG... I died laughing here.
.... and couldn't stop.
VERY CUTE!!!
and soooo clever
Of course it is, from BB
I expect it to be ahhhhmazing!! 👍🏻
Loved it - 💙
🎶 🎤🎵
xoxo
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Re: Re. Millennial King
13th Mar 2021 11:06pm
Thankyavewymuch...Elmer Fudd does Elvis 😁
I'm feeling good now...you've got a way about you. 🐻💋🐻💋🐻
I'm feeling good now...you've got a way about you. 🐻💋🐻💋🐻
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13th Mar 2021 11:39pm
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14th Mar 2021 5:34am
Re: Re. Millennial King
14th Mar 2021 5:38am
Daaaaaamn, you're good. BB
The truth shall set you free...
Lol
Ty very very much (hugs)
xoxo
🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻
😘
The truth shall set you free...
Lol
Ty very very much (hugs)
xoxo
🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻🤗🐻
😘
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