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Concrete Saints
There lives in the everyday
On a Wednesday late morning sidewalk
Of grimy city and in the small town
In the overcast of pregnant skies
Just plain folks
Blind enough of their own ego
To wear an immunity of self like a concrete saint
You see them in timeless pause
And watch in awe and ache
As blue and grey birds
With eyes as cloudy as your skies
Rest peacefully on their fingertips
Nurturing fat bellies with morsels of a sacred stillness
On a Wednesday late morning sidewalk
Of grimy city and in the small town
In the overcast of pregnant skies
Just plain folks
Blind enough of their own ego
To wear an immunity of self like a concrete saint
You see them in timeless pause
And watch in awe and ache
As blue and grey birds
With eyes as cloudy as your skies
Rest peacefully on their fingertips
Nurturing fat bellies with morsels of a sacred stillness
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3rd Apr 2020 5:49pm
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3rd Apr 2020 7:22pm
You painted small-town America with the poetic brushstrokes of a master word painter. You created a mood of timelessness in the ache of people living their American dream. And the birdman made for your brilliant character sketch that transcended mere description to rise into a realm of spiritual grace. Truly a wonder you've worked my friend.
John
John
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Anonymous
4th Apr 2020 1:46am
I really enjoy "an immunity of self like a concrete saint" (and concrete saint is a great title!) ... and also "eyes as cloudy as your skies" ... lovely poem!
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4th Apr 2020 1:55am
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4th Apr 2020 2:59am
Dear J,
From the picture to the last word you have captured an innocence long since passed over. Just by looking at the picture I was transported to an era where seamed silk stockings and vistory gardens were where it’s at, and then came the poem! “Just plain folks
Blind enough of their own ego
To wear an immunity of self like a concrete saint ” I think this stanza wins the Academy award. Excellent write. H🌷
From the picture to the last word you have captured an innocence long since passed over. Just by looking at the picture I was transported to an era where seamed silk stockings and vistory gardens were where it’s at, and then came the poem! “Just plain folks
Blind enough of their own ego
To wear an immunity of self like a concrete saint ” I think this stanza wins the Academy award. Excellent write. H🌷
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4th Apr 2020 3:26am
Re. Concrete Saints
4th Apr 2020 4:34am
I am cursed with tendency to put a musical framework around poetry. With this eloquent write, which starts with a title I never would have come up with, your examination time long ago suggests the work of Bill Moyers.
Fantastic job!
Fantastic job!
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4th Apr 2020 4:40am
I love your music references....keep them coming.
My father publishes a bluegrass magazine
I have rich history in all things music, and hold affinity with any mind that relates to poetry or life that way
Thank you, ted
My father publishes a bluegrass magazine
I have rich history in all things music, and hold affinity with any mind that relates to poetry or life that way
Thank you, ted
Re. Concrete Saints
4th Apr 2020 9:32am
My fav of yours that I've seen so far!
I read your stuff with much pleasure!
I read your stuff with much pleasure!
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5th Apr 2020 8:35pm
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4th Apr 2020 2:24pm
The imagery is so palpable Jen, just gorgeous, easy and yet its filled with sadness, you have captured that feeling so well. I love it to million pieces.
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5th Apr 2020 8:36pm
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4th Apr 2020 3:39pm
The humbling melancholy of this essence... the subterraneanly unassuming earthen simplistic rustic truth core.. yes peace . Is this...& A loudbold message in there these times. Loved the surprising economy to it.. esp tge second stanza is mind-blowing J ..Shine on..Peace light & love this b'day? & ev xx:)
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5th Apr 2020 8:37pm
Umma! Thank you. I'm wayyyy behind because I ran amuck yesterday for my b day
I can't wait to read your latest....😍
I can't wait to read your latest....😍
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Anonymous
5th Apr 2020 6:44pm
Calamity, this is wonerful from the very first line that captures the essence of what being a saint entails; they don't take a day off from being themselves
"There lives in the everyday
"There lives in the everyday
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5th Apr 2020 8:38pm