Above Xela

You're a good poet.  Solid  work.  Welcome to DU.  

In the spirit of honest critique I'll observe the following:

I like the repetition of 'The' in S2 because it signifies the beginning of sentences ( it being capped ).  This adds power and tension to each line.  Not sure about the endstop after L3; however, I can see its effectiveness.

Thanks for the feedback. It is always something ive done in terms of style.  Im used to spoken word so i try to use puncuation when i want to signify specific ways the poem is read. These would normally things i would express vocally

Welcome, Edward. I agree. It's nice to have a fresh writer here challenging our imaginations to conjure up wonderful imagery.

I also question the need for the endstop. Both of them, in fact, as you did not endstop the first stanza. Who needs the pesky critter anyway? But it is best to be consistent one way or the other - with or without.

Thanks for your crititique. Each grouping of stanzas should represent a complete thought. I can understand how the puncuation could throw a reader off though

If you are feeling her man up and kiss her well.  Keep on writing.