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don’t pity the man who tells you a sad story
what a picture: you, suckling a heroin teat.
we are all so sorry
and we understand
you’ve been badly treated
honey it’s not your fault
who could love a man like you? i must be the only one
who sees through you
so why would you deceive me
knowing how i care for you
who could handle a man like you?
with what you’ve been through
with the trust I’ve given you
with the trauma we share
how could you violate
my heart so
thoroughly
that i won’t trust a soul till I die
and you will be perversely proud
that you ruined me
-it’s just how I am, you say
-i know, says the girl next door
-it’s what I like about you. we’re just the same as each other
but you will always
i mean forever
be the worse
and she will also leave you
Published 12th Feb 2020
| Edited 23rd Feb 2020
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12th Feb 2020 9:13pm
12th Feb 2020 10:40pm
with what you’ve been through
with the trust I’ve given you
with the trauma we share
how could you violate
my heart so
thoroughly
.
.
.
but you will always
i mean forever
be the worse
and she will also leave you
Gosh. Powerful... Snarky, but it's more than a gristley naked strike of anger or string of sarcasm like you often leave us with in regards to romance or intimacy with your work. No, its also vulnerable in a wistful light, and i felt a certain sort of soft feminine flare- somewhat provocative while remaining distant (all without resorting to soft core erotica. Props. That shit annoys me at times tbh.. just between you and me lol). Acceptance but also a remorseful resentment- much like the love a woman or the rippling euphoria in a high.. Interesting perspective on this one. Enjoyed
with the trust I’ve given you
with the trauma we share
how could you violate
my heart so
thoroughly
.
.
.
but you will always
i mean forever
be the worse
and she will also leave you
Gosh. Powerful... Snarky, but it's more than a gristley naked strike of anger or string of sarcasm like you often leave us with in regards to romance or intimacy with your work. No, its also vulnerable in a wistful light, and i felt a certain sort of soft feminine flare- somewhat provocative while remaining distant (all without resorting to soft core erotica. Props. That shit annoys me at times tbh.. just between you and me lol). Acceptance but also a remorseful resentment- much like the love a woman or the rippling euphoria in a high.. Interesting perspective on this one. Enjoyed
13th Feb 2020 12:38pm
snarky, yes, it is 😂 i appreciate the comment about the soft core porn, i don’t regret writing those ones, I’m a soft core slut at heart.
ps please write again
ps please write again
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