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The Perfect Love
"If you love a flower, don’t pick it up.
Because if you pick it up it dies and it ceases to be what you love.
So if you love a flower, let it be.
Love is not about possession.
Love is about appreciation."
~ Osho
Love is not a possession,
Or an object of obsession;
It is selfless, never selfish,
Understanding, never jealous.
It is caring, and non-intrusive,
It's not too daring or elusive;
It's forgiving, always giving,
Never hissing, never hitting.
It's an expression of appreciation,
Without aggression or depreciation;
Nor a single expectation—
Love should never be vexatious.
It's feeling so enraptured,
Without feeling like you're captured;
It's so beautiful and free,
In it's sweet serenity.
Love isn't always fun and games,
But it's never void of passion;
It's expressed in many different ways,
And in many different fashions.
Sometimes it's helping with the rent,
When every cent you have is spent.
Or providing a little moral support,
To build a better rapport.
Sometimes love's a shoulder to cry on,
When there's no one to rely on.
It's a listening ear, and an open mind,
It's unconditional and kind.
Lastly, love is like the perfect drug,
Highly contagious, like a bug
Once you're bitten, it is injected
And forever, you're infected!
Because if you pick it up it dies and it ceases to be what you love.
So if you love a flower, let it be.
Love is not about possession.
Love is about appreciation."
~ Osho
Love is not a possession,
Or an object of obsession;
It is selfless, never selfish,
Understanding, never jealous.
It is caring, and non-intrusive,
It's not too daring or elusive;
It's forgiving, always giving,
Never hissing, never hitting.
It's an expression of appreciation,
Without aggression or depreciation;
Nor a single expectation—
Love should never be vexatious.
It's feeling so enraptured,
Without feeling like you're captured;
It's so beautiful and free,
In it's sweet serenity.
Love isn't always fun and games,
But it's never void of passion;
It's expressed in many different ways,
And in many different fashions.
Sometimes it's helping with the rent,
When every cent you have is spent.
Or providing a little moral support,
To build a better rapport.
Sometimes love's a shoulder to cry on,
When there's no one to rely on.
It's a listening ear, and an open mind,
It's unconditional and kind.
Lastly, love is like the perfect drug,
Highly contagious, like a bug
Once you're bitten, it is injected
And forever, you're infected!
Author's Note
I hope the break in the rhyming scheme in the 5th stanza didn't throw off the flow off too much. Opinions?
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Re. The Perfect Love
1st Feb 2020 4:04am
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1st Feb 2020 4:11am
It IS a wonderful thing :)
I only say it's like a drug because of the way a person's brain responds with happy chemicals in response to love!
Thank you for stopping by, Phantom! I appreciate your comment ❤️
I only say it's like a drug because of the way a person's brain responds with happy chemicals in response to love!
Thank you for stopping by, Phantom! I appreciate your comment ❤️
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1st Feb 2020 4:29am
Re. The Perfect Love
1st Feb 2020 5:25am
I love that quote NewB
Wish its understood by some...
Love is all that and all that is love..... Great and also ...pain.....but all came from love.......
Wish its understood by some...
Love is all that and all that is love..... Great and also ...pain.....but all came from love.......
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1st Feb 2020 5:59am
I will always strive to love more like this...
Thank you for your insightful comment and your RL entry :)
Thank you for your insightful comment and your RL entry :)
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Re: Re. The Perfect Love
2nd Feb 2020 9:11am
Awww, well that makes me feel better 😊
A fun little Easter egg... I like that lol.
Thank you for your kind words - you are very sweet ❤️
I appreciate you stopping by again! Best wishes to you,
-NewB
A fun little Easter egg... I like that lol.
Thank you for your kind words - you are very sweet ❤️
I appreciate you stopping by again! Best wishes to you,
-NewB
Re. The Perfect Love
1st Feb 2020 9:43pm
I love your take on love. Fine work, NewBeginnings. The break in the rhyming scheme doesn't throw me, by the way.
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Re: Re. The Perfect Love
7th Feb 2020 00:31am
I'm so glad that you think so, crow. I poured my heart and soul into this one!! Thank you for your reassurance! It really means a lot! Also, I'm flattered by your RL ... It was nice of you to stop by again ❤️
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7th Feb 2020 00:39am
Lol, Rex 😂! I'm not one to judge the life he lived, but had some very wise words here... Haha
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2nd Feb 2020 8:14am
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7th Feb 2020 00:43am
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8th Feb 2020 3:28am
Thank you, Ignoramus, for your readership and your kind words! You're awesome :)
Re. The Perfect Love
2nd Feb 2020 3:39pm
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8th Feb 2020 10:00am
Re. The Perfect Love
2nd Feb 2020 7:51pm
The rhythm behind the rhymes here is very strong for the most part, which is exceptionally difficult to achieve, so well done.
The rhythm does tend to wobble and become laboured as the poem continues, however, especially when you’re down to rhyming “on” with itself. I’d suggest either making the poem shorter or, better still, relaxing the adherence to the rhyme scheme just a touch. You don’t have to do the ABAB thing all the way through.
The rhythm does tend to wobble and become laboured as the poem continues, however, especially when you’re down to rhyming “on” with itself. I’d suggest either making the poem shorter or, better still, relaxing the adherence to the rhyme scheme just a touch. You don’t have to do the ABAB thing all the way through.
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9th Feb 2020 4:35am
Thanks for your honest criticism, The_Silly_Sibyl... Although I thought the same thing at one point, it was well-received, and by now I'm happy with it - so I think I'll leave it like it is. Your suggestions are truly appreciated, and I will keep them in mind for future poems :)
I actually tend to jump back and forth between structured and unstructured poetry. Finding a balance is tough for me, haha. I'm all or nothing - it seems you may be on to me! Lol
I actually tend to jump back and forth between structured and unstructured poetry. Finding a balance is tough for me, haha. I'm all or nothing - it seems you may be on to me! Lol
Re. The Perfect Love
4th Feb 2020 1:42am
Love is a curse but also a gift. We love in ways that don't make sense. Love is such a hard emotion to explain because people do it different ways. A mom to her son is different from a wife to her husband. Our perception changes throughout our cycle of life and that is what makes love so hard to predict.
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9th Feb 2020 7:46am
Thank you for your input, Jordan!
Love is a beautiful thing. What you said about the different types of love... reminded me of something. Apparently the ancient Greeks had different names for the different types of love. We kind of oversimplify - we just say love. Here are some of them...
Eros - Sexual passion, desire
Philia - deep friendship (brotherly love)
Storge - parent - child love
Ludus - playful affection between lovers
Agape - selfless love, love of strangers (charity)
Pragma - mature love, such as that of the deep understanding of long-married couples
Philautia - self love
I thought you might find that interesting...
Anyway, thanks again for stopping by :)
Love is a beautiful thing. What you said about the different types of love... reminded me of something. Apparently the ancient Greeks had different names for the different types of love. We kind of oversimplify - we just say love. Here are some of them...
Eros - Sexual passion, desire
Philia - deep friendship (brotherly love)
Storge - parent - child love
Ludus - playful affection between lovers
Agape - selfless love, love of strangers (charity)
Pragma - mature love, such as that of the deep understanding of long-married couples
Philautia - self love
I thought you might find that interesting...
Anyway, thanks again for stopping by :)
Re. The Perfect Love
4th Feb 2020 7:46am
Re: Re. The Perfect Love
9th Feb 2020 6:56pm
Awww, you are always so sweet, L :)
I'm so glad that it enlightened your spirits. I appreciate your kind words!
I'm so glad that it enlightened your spirits. I appreciate your kind words!
Re. The Perfect Love
5th Feb 2020 2:54am
I really enjoyed this. I have decided to only do readings of my poetry. I changed my poem to my voice and not the one you guys saw. I need to be myself. You are a good friend and an even better writer.
Jordan
Jordan
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9th Feb 2020 6:57pm
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Re: Re. The Perfect Love
9th Feb 2020 6:58pm
That's a really wonderful compliment, Didi3d. This is my idealistic of version of love... something to strive for. I'm really glad that you liked it so much! That means a lot to me :)
I appreciate you stopping by to read my poem... !
I appreciate you stopping by to read my poem... !
Re. The Perfect Love
30th Mar 2020 4:05am
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31st Mar 2020 8:09pm
Thanks so much, Olivia. You're very kind - I appreciate your readership and RL entry :)
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11th May 2020 9:49pm