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Oh yes-
I screamed
as it
rushed
gushed
while I
pushed
and then
it was
hushed
lights-out.
we came-reached-left
within moments 1.
the death of a storm
the last blink
in the tail
of a wild comet
but with a tale
that something
would be born while
I-pause-we did
cheap born
a n d
while I got the cheque
for it
her phone calls started
and became
frantic
I smiled-thought-acted
within moments 2.
planning a surprise I barged in
with my gift
only to find her gone
faucet-running
water-rising
in the overflowing bathtub
there were shards afloat
that
swam
swirled
swooped
in the crimson ocean
my gift
fell inside the vertigo
as I saw some pulp
on my brand new shoe.
lights-out.
Published 3rd Jan 2012
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4th Jan 2012 5:46am
Simple, yet complex. If u ask me. It's easy to read but must b paid close attention tho so it unfolds right. This is what contradiction looks like when its goin against itself. Great poem. Love your work
4th Jan 2012 1:16pm
bluethoughts
thank you for the visit
and sharing your thought.
much appreciated.
curtsy,
S'
thank you for the visit
and sharing your thought.
much appreciated.
curtsy,
S'
8th Jan 2012 11:41pm
This piece. Makes me get goosebumps. The way you used the wording was amazing, thank you, I will read this over and over again. :)
9th Jan 2012 2:31pm
DRooney
Thanks for stopping by.
Pleased that it had that
effect.
S'
p.s-Thanks for the listing.
Humbled.
Thanks for stopping by.
Pleased that it had that
effect.
S'
p.s-Thanks for the listing.
Humbled.
