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Sky is Mind
Birds of a feather—
flocks far and near
Poetry is atmosphere
bringing kinds together
Celestial vessels flying free
art supporting me
Poems are the greater
parts of precious hearts
flocks far and near
Poetry is atmosphere
bringing kinds together
Celestial vessels flying free
art supporting me
Poems are the greater
parts of precious hearts
Written by
EdibleWords
Published 20th Jan 2020
| Edited 22nd Jan 2020
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Re. Sky is Mind
What a sweet sentiment, Jess. That's such a positive way to view DU and poetry in general.
I would cap celestial and Poems in S2. ;)
I would cap celestial and Poems in S2. ;)
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Re. Sky is Mind
20th Jan 2020 4:41am
Yes, we do flock together... very poetic and sweet little write, Edible :)
We are separate, but our hearts are united through our poetry!
We are separate, but our hearts are united through our poetry!
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Re. Sky is Mind
20th Jan 2020 10:56pm
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20th Jan 2020 11:04pm
Re: Re. Sky is Mind
21st Jan 2020 10:34pm
Thank you..
To be fair... It's not exactly original but a rephrasing of the Bible "out of the abundance of the heart the mouth speaks"
To be fair... It's not exactly original but a rephrasing of the Bible "out of the abundance of the heart the mouth speaks"
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21st Jan 2020 10:46pm
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21st Jan 2020 11:08pm
You are thinking of a verb... right? That's cool, too.
But
I was meaning more than one "flock" of birds... slightly different.
But
I was meaning more than one "flock" of birds... slightly different.
Re: Re. Sky is Mind
When the subject ( Birds ) is plural the verb is singular -
Birds [. . .] flock
or
A bird [. . .] flocks
right now it reads awkwardly as a sentence because flocks is lowercase. You could separate with an em dash and it would define the difference.
Birds of a feather—
flocks far and near
Poetry is atmosphere
bringing kinds together
Birds [. . .] flock
or
A bird [. . .] flocks
right now it reads awkwardly as a sentence because flocks is lowercase. You could separate with an em dash and it would define the difference.
Birds of a feather—
flocks far and near
Poetry is atmosphere
bringing kinds together
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Re: Re. Sky is Mind
22nd Jan 2020 00:36am