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Whiff of freshness
Sunrises are like whiff of freshness,
A touch on your soul,
Full of Hippy Happy vibes,
Savour it before you start
A brand new day
As no two sunrises are same
But each one is like a whiff of freshness…
— KP
A touch on your soul,
Full of Hippy Happy vibes,
Savour it before you start
A brand new day
As no two sunrises are same
But each one is like a whiff of freshness…
— KP
Published 14th Jan 2020
Author's Note
It is how I feel. That sense of being positive. In love. Closer to nature. And living in little beautiful moments.
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Such a beautiful little poem, kp1200! I loved this ❤️
Since you wanted honest critique, the only thing that threw me off was the beginning:
"Sunrise are like whiff" should be either "Sunrises are like a whiff", or "sunrise is like a whiff" grammatically. Anyway, I hope that helps! Otherwise... Perfect!
Since you wanted honest critique, the only thing that threw me off was the beginning:
"Sunrise are like whiff" should be either "Sunrises are like a whiff", or "sunrise is like a whiff" grammatically. Anyway, I hope that helps! Otherwise... Perfect!
15th Jan 2020 8:23am
Thanks for such an honest words and going through my words. Means so much. And thanks for pointing out the grammatical error. Have corrected it :)
My pleasure, KP, you are a fantastic writer! If you get a chance let me know what you think of my latest work :)
