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Truce
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Bus station...
I create space in myself,...
What could come in and fill it up?
As if in slow motion...
I create emptiness in myself
It is like vomiting air
Who could come and fill it up?
Something inside me always rebels
And it neither picks up nor drops off passengers
Nobody owns it but me
Once trapped by my evasion,...
I have to stick with the peace I feel
Relief from reality ... ... and life
A kiosk newsstand,... a book by William S. Burroughs
It is not a void ... It is a truce
I put trust in it and see how far it goes ...
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Bus station...
I create space in myself,...
What could come in and fill it up?
As if in slow motion...
I create emptiness in myself
It is like vomiting air
Who could come and fill it up?
Something inside me always rebels
And it neither picks up nor drops off passengers
Nobody owns it but me
Once trapped by my evasion,...
I have to stick with the peace I feel
Relief from reality ... ... and life
A kiosk newsstand,... a book by William S. Burroughs
It is not a void ... It is a truce
I put trust in it and see how far it goes ...
... ...
Published 6th Jan 2020
| Edited 7th Jan 2020
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6th Jan 2020 2:27am
6th Jan 2020 2:35pm
9th Mar 2020 9:05pm
This reminds me of some of my own thoughts on being in a prison of me. Wondering how to get out, how to fill me up. Some of my other poems, talk of these thoughts.
In your poem *Prison of Me* you talk about censorship.
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There is no censorship in *Truce*, it is only just the making of surreal situations.
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There is no censorship in *Truce*, it is only just the making of surreal situations.
9th Mar 2020 11:40pm
Yes, ok. I reread. I picked up on my thought with
"Something inside me always rebels
And it neither picks up nor drops off passengers".
I'm thinking that rebels is akin to being in a prison.
Tell me what you think. I like that you tell the person commenting, your thoughts on your own poems. I don't know how to comment, critique or whatever, you help me to understand the meaning you want to convey. Thank you.
"Something inside me always rebels
And it neither picks up nor drops off passengers".
I'm thinking that rebels is akin to being in a prison.
Tell me what you think. I like that you tell the person commenting, your thoughts on your own poems. I don't know how to comment, critique or whatever, you help me to understand the meaning you want to convey. Thank you.
10th Mar 2020 00:06am
10th Mar 2020 00:09am
