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Sitting Alone.
I’m alone.
Only temporary.
As I sit I dwell.
My accomplishments, my family.
I can do much better.
I will... Iv’e had so many chances.
I need to show the love I hide.
The love I don’t always see.
Mending broken branches.
I need to be present for everything.
Everyone.
For my sake and theirs.
To changed the dark feelings that sit with me here.
I am blessed.
Only temporary.
As I sit I dwell.
My accomplishments, my family.
I can do much better.
I will... Iv’e had so many chances.
I need to show the love I hide.
The love I don’t always see.
Mending broken branches.
I need to be present for everything.
Everyone.
For my sake and theirs.
To changed the dark feelings that sit with me here.
I am blessed.
Published 28th Dec 2019
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28th Dec 2019 7:59am
I'm going to toy with the formatting as the topic is good.
'I’m alone,
temporarily,
as I dwell
on my accomplishments - my family.
I can do much better.
I've had many chances.
I want to give the love I hide,
a love that I don’t always see.
I want to mend those broken branches,
be present
for everything,
for everyone,
for them
and me.
I'm going to turn those demons I sit with to Gods,
and
know I am blessed.'
You have great emotion for writing. Please keep bringing it to the table. Try to get the reader to feel that same emotional turmoil you do at the time of writing. Best of luck.
'I’m alone,
temporarily,
as I dwell
on my accomplishments - my family.
I can do much better.
I've had many chances.
I want to give the love I hide,
a love that I don’t always see.
I want to mend those broken branches,
be present
for everything,
for everyone,
for them
and me.
I'm going to turn those demons I sit with to Gods,
and
know I am blessed.'
You have great emotion for writing. Please keep bringing it to the table. Try to get the reader to feel that same emotional turmoil you do at the time of writing. Best of luck.
28th Dec 2019 6:03pm
Wow, great advice and I love how the tweeks made it flow and hit hard. Thanks!
28th Dec 2019 4:49pm
28th Dec 2019 7:50pm
Solitude is important.... it makes us see... and one day you will see:)
Love the deepness and raw truth of this poem.
Love the deepness and raw truth of this poem.
