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The Deal Went Sour
We all get there
Look at ourselves
Having reached
that terrifying
loneliness
Ourselves driving
ourselves insane!
Life throwing it at us
suddenly
unexpectedly
I sold my bike
Might take up hiking
Published 12th Dec 2019
| Edited 15th Feb 2020
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12th Dec 2019 8:01pm
This has such a subtle hint of my entire life epiphany. Ironic and straight to the point. Xo
9th Feb 2020 11:31pm
The ending really pulls the whole story together. Excellent delivery.
9th Feb 2020 11:32pm
15th Dec 2019 6:00am
completely agreed with the other commenter. the ending is wonderfully written and ties it together. stopped me in my tracks. i don't know how i feel about the spacing; for as concise as the writing and ending are, i feel like the extra spacing is a bit superfluous, but it is kind of consistent with the theme. still, though, nice stuff.
9th Feb 2020 11:30pm
21st Dec 2019 4:03am
9th Feb 2020 11:31pm
