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The Cutting Room Floor
The only things on the cutting room floor
Is my mind, body, heart and soul
Broken by you
Lots of blood-soaked tissues
Blood shed for you
Are blunted bloody razor blades
Carving your name
Are floods of uncontrollable tears
All wept for you
Are bent and torn photographs
Taken of you
Are videos made to be enjoyed?
But now not by you
Is the genuine love and compassion
I had for you
Will be my lifeless corpse
Cut down by you
There are so many things on the cutting room floor
I cannot create an escape route
This is a video about you
Published 6th Dec 2019
| Edited 9th Dec 2019
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6th Dec 2019 5:29pm
Raw write. Refrain lines can be good, but sometimes are a bit monotonous. I'd perhaps make it more like an envelope. One in the beginning and end. Streamline it.
9th Dec 2019 11:43pm
thank you daniel for your positive suggestions - I think I will try to adjust it as you say :-))))))))))))))))))
9th Dec 2019 11:45pm
12th Dec 2019 4:22pm
