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Bag Of Bones
Fold Winters breath between hidden valley
Beats break like no other
across the literal back
We rode the eventide, smoke,sin & skin
lost indentations that no longer remain
pierce the lonely mind
solemn statues, ornament objects
shine
to shine in the dark with widening iris
shook across hyper'ed flesh, every bump rises
The beast of two backs, painted artisan aplomb
kiss me empty with once-upon-a-time-
loss
The cretin emerges swallowed in sweat
a token of appreciation
where Mary says "together
"Oh Mary Mother of God"
Yes
will, that fills the belly burning hot
were it not easily remembered
backboard beats and giggling
where the storm raged
the eye shifting from beauty mark
bones,
bag of certain dust
dry over many fires
we've watched the flames
rise
orange, red and yellow
close
the oven door fading blue
the window remains
turns...eventual ash
Beats break like no other
across the literal back
We rode the eventide, smoke,sin & skin
lost indentations that no longer remain
pierce the lonely mind
solemn statues, ornament objects
shine
to shine in the dark with widening iris
shook across hyper'ed flesh, every bump rises
The beast of two backs, painted artisan aplomb
kiss me empty with once-upon-a-time-
loss
The cretin emerges swallowed in sweat
a token of appreciation
where Mary says "together
"Oh Mary Mother of God"
Yes
will, that fills the belly burning hot
were it not easily remembered
backboard beats and giggling
where the storm raged
the eye shifting from beauty mark
bones,
bag of certain dust
dry over many fires
we've watched the flames
rise
orange, red and yellow
close
the oven door fading blue
the window remains
turns...eventual ash
Published 17th Nov 2019
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18th Nov 2019 12:28pm
Really great piece!!
Love the imagery and flow
Quite the journey!
I dig this excellent write 👏🙌
Love the imagery and flow
Quite the journey!
I dig this excellent write 👏🙌
18th Nov 2019 12:33pm
Appreciate Your visit Hunter!!!
Thank You for Your kindness, I'm glad it hit with Ya!!!
Thank You for Your kindness, I'm glad it hit with Ya!!!
19th Nov 2019 9:46pm
This write suggests such an openness to what nature brings to our lives that I smile at the thought of sitting down and throwing out musical ideas with you. Then I remind myself that my proficiency on the guitar isn’t up to such a task.
Great write!
Great write!
20th Nov 2019 1:32pm
Who needs proficiency to create Ted?
I too have such thoughts My Brother...I appreciate such High praise, as Always YoU My Friend-are too kind.
This particular ditty...we know too well eh?
We tell it with the trees or tell in in concrete
Great to see You!!!
I too have such thoughts My Brother...I appreciate such High praise, as Always YoU My Friend-are too kind.
This particular ditty...we know too well eh?
We tell it with the trees or tell in in concrete
Great to see You!!!
20th Nov 2019 00:12am
I have been over this carefully a few times, admiring the word usage and feeling it's meter. There is a sensual quality to me. It is a feat to retain a sense of eloquence and not stray into ribaldry when describing the sensual, which I think you achieved adroitly. Nice work.
20th Nov 2019 1:37pm
I am Honored to see You here DC :)
Meter tends to be my first drive in a Write, I also tend to have certain keys in my mind as its being spat out...silliness to do it at times but its how my mind works.....tis hard to keep from falling into sing-song type delivery (for that drives me nuts)
I am glad the sensual nature came through, that is the focus despite the touch of melancholy.
Appreciate Your comment, time and presence!!!
Meter tends to be my first drive in a Write, I also tend to have certain keys in my mind as its being spat out...silliness to do it at times but its how my mind works.....tis hard to keep from falling into sing-song type delivery (for that drives me nuts)
I am glad the sensual nature came through, that is the focus despite the touch of melancholy.
Appreciate Your comment, time and presence!!!
7th Jan 2020 12:50pm
3rd Feb 2020 1:34pm
2nd Apr 2020 8:04pm
This is sublime erotica....i float here. My voyeur alive and seeing goosefleshed bodies
