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August Moon
My wine glass catches a burnt sky
and pours lilac over pan fried sea bass,
couples clink and chat laughter
as the lonely ocean plays with silver.
A sturgeon moon scoops waves
high over the last strip of cooling sand,
as swaying beach front lights
splash colour onto dark returning tides.
Held hands remind me of charm bracelets,
unwrapped on the drift of distant music.
I smile looking down beyond your chair,
until the dry drips of an empty bottle
make me look up.
and pours lilac over pan fried sea bass,
couples clink and chat laughter
as the lonely ocean plays with silver.
A sturgeon moon scoops waves
high over the last strip of cooling sand,
as swaying beach front lights
splash colour onto dark returning tides.
Held hands remind me of charm bracelets,
unwrapped on the drift of distant music.
I smile looking down beyond your chair,
until the dry drips of an empty bottle
make me look up.
Author's Note
Inspiration: A table for one, plates filled with sunsets and old memories, you should never go back unless you thrive on melancholy and that just wont do. Oh and a huge august moon.
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Re. August Moon
18th Oct 2019 9:34pm
delicate, mesmerising visuals rendered in that palette of wistful melancholia
burnt sunset, lilac over sea bass, a sturgeon moon and the lonely ocean playing with silver? seriously gorgeous. all gems strung by a fine chain, of silver of course, and one i'd sit and 'tell' with fingers over any rosary
burnt sunset, lilac over sea bass, a sturgeon moon and the lonely ocean playing with silver? seriously gorgeous. all gems strung by a fine chain, of silver of course, and one i'd sit and 'tell' with fingers over any rosary
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Re: Re. August Moon
19th Oct 2019 10:49am
Thank you butters, pleased by your comments it’s good to know what’s coming across, you are a great reader.
Re. August Moon
18th Oct 2019 10:19pm
Quite a powerful piece! I like the way you set a comforting scene in the first 3 lines, then contrast the mood with "as the lonely ocean plays with silver".
Empty bottle image also very powerful.
Empty bottle image also very powerful.
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Re: Re. August Moon
19th Oct 2019 10:50am
Glad that comes across and really appreciate your comments, thank you for reading
Re: Re. August Moon
19th Oct 2019 10:51am
Re. August Moon
19th Oct 2019 00:45am
Memories. Ghost in our mind that haunt our days and nights. Very well said.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. August Moon
19th Oct 2019 10:53am
Yes it can be quite sad in the echo of happy memories, thank you for your considered comment
Re. August Moon
21st Oct 2019 2:41pm
You had me at
“My wine glass catches a burnt sky
and pours lilac over pan fried sea bass”
“My wine glass catches a burnt sky
and pours lilac over pan fried sea bass”
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Re. August Moon
21st Oct 2019 7:55pm
The details carry a sense of loneliness and acceptance for me. Great work. 🙏🏻
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Re: Re. August Moon
26th Nov 2019 1:28am
Both observations make me happy DC as this is what I was going for, sorry im late coming back.
Re: Re. August Moon
27th Nov 2019 10:04pm
No problem take your time. I mostly stop in when it's slow at work these days, which isn't often.
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