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Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
7th Oct 2019 00:26am
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8th Oct 2019 11:58am
Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
7th Oct 2019 00:54am
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8th Oct 2019 11:59am
Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
7th Oct 2019 9:25am
Its very good. Tense and smooth, like fine scotch whisky. (I respectfully suggest altering 'will never' to 'never will' in the third-to-last line.)
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Re: Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
7th Oct 2019 11:50am
You're right - split infinitive - oopsie - will revamp once I get other comments
Re: Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
7th Oct 2019 2:08pm
Re: Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
8th Oct 2019 12:01pm
may not scan rhyme-wise and feels perhaps a little too portentous - but thank you for the suggestion - others' thoughts are always helpful
Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
7th Oct 2019 12:39pm
"And know that, as I'm tongue-tied, I've no choice:
I have to savour all he has to store;"
Such a deliciously, suggestive line. Expresses that want quite clearly.
Another decadent musing.
I have to savour all he has to store;"
Such a deliciously, suggestive line. Expresses that want quite clearly.
Another decadent musing.
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Re: Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
8th Oct 2019 12:03pm
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8th Oct 2019 12:35pm
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8th Oct 2019 8:02pm
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8th Oct 2019 8:50pm
Re. Tongue And Mouth And Hand
15th Oct 2019 7:41pm
To find oneself through such submission is the ultimate freedom. You really have my screen sizzling my friend.
XoXoXo
John
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John
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