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Whisper my Name
A whisper.
A dream.
What remains to be seen.
In the dark.
In the morning.
Just before you wake.
Close your eyes.
Kiss my lips.
My secrets fill your ear.
Wispy visions.
Reckless nights.
Memories that are shared.
New.
To begin again.
In the dawn of the new day.
Fresh.
Flesh on flesh.
You are echoing through me.
Break away.
Lose your chains.
Set me free to whisper your name.
A dream.
What remains to be seen.
In the dark.
In the morning.
Just before you wake.
Close your eyes.
Kiss my lips.
My secrets fill your ear.
Wispy visions.
Reckless nights.
Memories that are shared.
New.
To begin again.
In the dawn of the new day.
Fresh.
Flesh on flesh.
You are echoing through me.
Break away.
Lose your chains.
Set me free to whisper your name.
Published 6th Oct 2019
| Edited 19th Dec 2019
Author's Note
Updated Author's Note:
🙂
The overall message is roughly:
It's about memories and new ones.
Whispering my name, means you found me in this dream, and that releases me, to whisper your name.
🙂
The overall message is roughly:
It's about memories and new ones.
Whispering my name, means you found me in this dream, and that releases me, to whisper your name.
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6th Oct 2019 11:46am
I was caught in your opening: ‘A whisper. A dream. What remains to be seen.’
The crispness of thought lured me on to dwell upon the closing and my favourite line: ‘set me free to whisper your name’
Thank you for the moment.
The crispness of thought lured me on to dwell upon the closing and my favourite line: ‘set me free to whisper your name’
Thank you for the moment.
7th Oct 2019 3:27am
6th Oct 2019 10:48pm
The brevity of each line carries a very dreamlike quality to me, snatches of thought. Touches lightly into the erotic, with subtle and tasteful intimations. It's a lovely write.
7th Oct 2019 3:28am
7th Oct 2019 4:15am
7th Oct 2019 4:45am
7th Oct 2019 10:11pm
I agree with Daniel's comment above. And this poem has a lovely lightly sensuous feel to it, reflected in the short lines, like waking-up thoughts. And a belated welcome to DUP. Best regards, Josh.
7th Oct 2019 11:56pm
Thank you, Josh for your wonderful replies. Much appreciated. 🌹
And thank you for the belated welcome. 😊
And thank you for the belated welcome. 😊
23rd Nov 2019 4:38am
9th Dec 2019 7:12am
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- Edited 22nd Feb 2020 10:45am
17th Dec 2019 9:27pm
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