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Mistakes That Take
Treason
gave reason
secrets discovered
no disguise, or cover
confused reactions
spurning to action
a revenge cloaked
into the oak chest
instruments
to strum the apology
whimpering
to his whim
nothing discussed
hearing him cuss
Stripped of all attire
panties ripped
the execution of justice
may not be just
she will be groped
but first the rope
will leave her affixed
intent that his fix
shall press certain buttons
her butt seeks the infraction
at a blindfold's obstruction
digits slicked in the fold
to be primed for that licking
each calculated lick to agitate
legs parting wider
anxious to part
gave reason
secrets discovered
no disguise, or cover
confused reactions
spurning to action
a revenge cloaked
into the oak chest
instruments
to strum the apology
whimpering
to his whim
nothing discussed
hearing him cuss
Stripped of all attire
panties ripped
the execution of justice
may not be just
she will be groped
but first the rope
will leave her affixed
intent that his fix
shall press certain buttons
her butt seeks the infraction
at a blindfold's obstruction
digits slicked in the fold
to be primed for that licking
each calculated lick to agitate
legs parting wider
anxious to part
Published 29th Sep 2019
Author's Note
This was an experiment to take a word from the previous line and work it into the following line. Give it a try, it is an interesting challenge.
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29th Sep 2019 7:33pm
29th Sep 2019 9:23pm
Trying to mix it up...though somehow led me to that common theme. Thanks for the read.
29th Sep 2019 7:37pm
Let me see here
He that laughs first laugh last
La... La... La....La
A song I love to sing
When I am not committing and sin
I hope I followed the instructions correctly. If not you can never say I did not try... showoff
He that laughs first laugh last
La... La... La....La
A song I love to sing
When I am not committing and sin
I hope I followed the instructions correctly. If not you can never say I did not try... showoff
29th Sep 2019 9:27pm
Perhaps a private tutorial is in order. I enjoyed the enthusiasm in the attempt, but the second stanza may need some massaging. ;)
29th Sep 2019 9:34pm
Bummer, yes, you are probably right.. sighs, I think I could use a very good hard lesson to right my errors, if you could recommend me to a private tutor who is willing to take his time in learning me his poetic passion, send him my way, please
29th Sep 2019 10:59pm
It might be best to go to the source. His pointer can give implicit instruction. Once, you've got it, you may not look back. For the first lesson, find the second word for line 2 in the word restrained. There are many options...I see four possibilities.
30th Sep 2019 00:01am
Rain mist I feel on my lips as it drips
Rips my heart as soft shreds
Reds the color of love for soft hands to console
Ole as the day is young
Well teacher, do I get a passing grade, if not I may have to sleep my way to the head of the class
Rips my heart as soft shreds
Reds the color of love for soft hands to console
Ole as the day is young
Well teacher, do I get a passing grade, if not I may have to sleep my way to the head of the class
30th Sep 2019 1:04am
Although I would enjoy a play by play of the latter, you nailed the exercise and furnished a lovely poem. You will have to come by later to get your gold star.
30th Sep 2019 3:43am
Seriously, I did it.... sweet.. compliments to my teacher..., and I will stop by to get my gold star, I will be traveling from abroad, therefore, I hope the anticipation will be worth the wait, enjoy your evening my tender poet and handsome teacher
30th Sep 2019 4:29am
Safe travels. I will keep it secured for your return. Tender and handsome in the same sentence. I am royally spoiled. Enjoy your slumber!
30th Sep 2019 6:00am
Oooh...I love this clever little trick. I kept wondering why those words were underlined. Does this form have a name that you know of ?
The content matter was quite interesting too. Tender with a side of naughty was served;)
The content matter was quite interesting too. Tender with a side of naughty was served;)
30th Sep 2019 11:45am
I'm certain this style must have a name, but I don't know what it is. It was a fun challenge. You should try, if feeling inspired. Thanks for commenting.
