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Lachrymo
Another empty day
Pills to fill the space
But I feel the wisps of wind
Tearing me down again
Falling into a pool
Of my own disdain
Pills to fill the space
But I feel the wisps of wind
Tearing me down again
Falling into a pool
Of my own disdain
Published 26th Sep 2019
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26th Sep 2019 5:20am
Dear D,
“Falling into a pool
Of my own disdain”.
Whoa, talk about truth. Awesome thought here. Excellent title. Felt this as far back as a minute ago. Very powerful write my friend! Sending hugs!
H🌷
“Falling into a pool
Of my own disdain”.
Whoa, talk about truth. Awesome thought here. Excellent title. Felt this as far back as a minute ago. Very powerful write my friend! Sending hugs!
H🌷
26th Sep 2019 11:07am
26th Sep 2019 9:13pm
Hi Desolate. There is palpable gravity to your write, which is good. Brevity is often a nice technique.
30th Sep 2019 7:06pm
"wisps of wind" and "pool of my own disdain" are powerful images. In few words you express so much. Wonderful brevity.
