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whisper
pain drips like a faulty faucet
it is incessant and irritating
droning on and on in the background
until it thunders in your head
drip
drip
drip
with a mind all its own the heart aches
it doesn't listen to reason
a maniac
it will send you over the edge
drip
drip
drip
it drones on and on
picking on your soft spots
until you agree with it
there is no other choice
drip
drip
drip
in death there is peace
no heart to ache
and no more pain to silence
Author's Note
I'm not suicidal just following a thought ❤
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Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jun 2022 2:45am
6th Aug 2019 00:42am
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Re: Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 00:50am
thank you graciously dearest Ethan that's really what emotional pain made me think of...an incessant drip of hurt that you can't shut off... I'm so happy the formatting worked for you...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
6th Aug 2019 10:55am
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Re: Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 7:40pm
thank you graciously dearest HF you made me smile wide with your beautiful comment...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 12:46pm
NICELY WRITTEN QUEEN FOR IT BEST TO EXPRESS YOUR INNER THOUGHTS THROUGH THE MIND UNVEILING IT FROM THE FLOW OF A PEN UPON PAPER, FOR TO RELEASE IS A BETTER WAY OF GAINING PEACE THROUGH SERENITY OF THE HEART AND MIND AND SOUL.
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6th Aug 2019 7:43pm
thank you graciously dearest Stoney for your beautiful thoughts and insight...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
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7th Aug 2019 11:54am
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7th Aug 2019 9:09pm
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Anonymous
6th Aug 2019 2:47pm
The only pain felt is that of those left behind. Nothing ever leaves no mark. It's the nature of existence, beautiful Dark Angel. The analogy of pain dripping is very accurate. It's like the soul is bleeding. I love you...
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 7:44pm
thank you beautiful Willow you're right of course whenever these feelings sneak up on me I think of my family... I cherish your insight and love...
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹
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6th Aug 2019 3:54pm
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6th Aug 2019 7:45pm
Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 6:09pm
Mabey im crazy but i kinda read this another way. i felt the drips were rain and i was jumping in the puddles between life and death between living in the moment and dancing on the precipice of eternity. I loved this. xx
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Re: Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 6:13pm
thank you that's a beautiful thought, so very beautiful... I knew there was something about you...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 7:23pm
The repeated 'drip ... drip ... drip' gives a relentless feel that's scary but badboyjack puts an interesting spin on how 'relentlessness' can be read in a different way.
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Re: Re. whisper
6th Aug 2019 7:46pm
thank you dearest Josh for the love on this write I liked what Jack had to say to...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
Anonymous
- Edited 3rd Dec 2019 3:45pm
7th Aug 2019 11:07pm
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Re: Re. whisper
7th Aug 2019 11:12pm
thank you graciously for the love here pain I think is universal to us all...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤