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Interstate Pleasure
As we drive around lost like we tend to do
You get a look in your eye, out of the blue
I know what you want, and I am willing
As I unzip your pants, to give you a thrilling
The moan in your throat and the grin on your face
As my hand takes its rightful place
As I stroke and I choke your now hardened shaft
You moan and you groan at my secret craft
Now it is time for me to go down
And tickle the tip of your swollen crown
With my wet tongue I moisten and I glisten
For those sweet moans I will listen
Faster and faster I swallow you whole
Making you cum is my true goal
Deeper you push me by grabbing my hair
Closer and closer you are almost there
Down my throat your salty sweet juices flow
As you say, that was one hell of a blow
Now I am horny and need a release
Why not slip your fingers into my crease
I raise up my skirt and reveal the lace
And enjoy the look upon your face
I lower my panties that are wet with desire
As I let you feel the warmth of my fire
I flick my clit as you plunge your fingers
Your taste in my mouth forever lingers
Multitasking you said you could do
Oh my God lover, I had no clue
You plunge and you plunge while I rub my clit
As you feel the tightness of my slit
Pull the fuck over I need your dick now
There is a rest stop ahead and there we can pow
We pull around back and there it is dark
Under a tree is where we will park
You get out of the car and come to my side
Pull me on top so I can give you a ride
Deeply and slowly doesn't last long
Faster and faster I pound your dong
Together we cum and scream out loud
We didn't even notice we drew in a crowd
© Rachel Orrick
You get a look in your eye, out of the blue
I know what you want, and I am willing
As I unzip your pants, to give you a thrilling
The moan in your throat and the grin on your face
As my hand takes its rightful place
As I stroke and I choke your now hardened shaft
You moan and you groan at my secret craft
Now it is time for me to go down
And tickle the tip of your swollen crown
With my wet tongue I moisten and I glisten
For those sweet moans I will listen
Faster and faster I swallow you whole
Making you cum is my true goal
Deeper you push me by grabbing my hair
Closer and closer you are almost there
Down my throat your salty sweet juices flow
As you say, that was one hell of a blow
Now I am horny and need a release
Why not slip your fingers into my crease
I raise up my skirt and reveal the lace
And enjoy the look upon your face
I lower my panties that are wet with desire
As I let you feel the warmth of my fire
I flick my clit as you plunge your fingers
Your taste in my mouth forever lingers
Multitasking you said you could do
Oh my God lover, I had no clue
You plunge and you plunge while I rub my clit
As you feel the tightness of my slit
Pull the fuck over I need your dick now
There is a rest stop ahead and there we can pow
We pull around back and there it is dark
Under a tree is where we will park
You get out of the car and come to my side
Pull me on top so I can give you a ride
Deeply and slowly doesn't last long
Faster and faster I pound your dong
Together we cum and scream out loud
We didn't even notice we drew in a crowd
© Rachel Orrick
Written by
raorrick
(Rachel O.)
Published 13th Dec 2011
| Edited 9th Feb 2013
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Surprise ending
13th Dec 2011 10:01pm
As I read this piece I discovered a catchy tune which resulted in a great flow.
The ending was priceless.
Thanks for sharing...
The ending was priceless.
Thanks for sharing...
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re: Surprise ending
13th Dec 2011 10:09pm
Thank you so much...it is my first one, so it means a lot...thank you for taking the time to comment! :)
re: re: Surprise ending
13th Dec 2011 10:33pm
You did a great job.
Keep up the great work. I will keep an out for more of your work.
Cheers
Keep up the great work. I will keep an out for more of your work.
Cheers
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Anonymous
13th Dec 2011 11:42pm
raorrick,
Great idea and you played it out to the very surprising end. Cool.
Favorite line:
"Now I am horny and need a release
Why not slip your fingers into my crease"
Enjoyed,
tornado
Great idea and you played it out to the very surprising end. Cool.
Favorite line:
"Now I am horny and need a release
Why not slip your fingers into my crease"
Enjoyed,
tornado
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re: re: Interstate
Thank you so much tornado. It means so much that you took the time to read and comment on my words. :)
great flow!
Anonymous
14th Dec 2011 00:14am
This was so sexy, i loved it!!welcome to DU!
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re: great flow!
14th Dec 2011 00:25am
Nice
14th Dec 2011 1:40am
"Together we cum and scream out loud
We didn't even notice we drew in a crowd"
Classic line
I thought it was funny and sexy
We didn't even notice we drew in a crowd"
Classic line
I thought it was funny and sexy
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re: Nice
14th Dec 2011 1:53am
Thank you kourtnissixxx...it is my favorite line in the poem. Thank you so much for your time and your comment. :)
Hi
14th Dec 2011 3:42am
re: Hi
14th Dec 2011 4:37am
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14th Dec 2011 3:42am
give me a moment to wipe the steam
of off my screen——ah, that's better ...
Would love to see this as a one act stage performance.
of off my screen——ah, that's better ...
Would love to see this as a one act stage performance.
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re: @@@@@@@
14th Dec 2011 4:39am
reality
15th Dec 2011 6:23am
tha poem is well writen.i love the prose n how one feels like its so real.like you are actually seing the ongoings...damn!!
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re: reality
15th Dec 2011 7:38am
Thank you so much raw-freak! I am glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you for taking the time to comment. :)
Nice
Anonymous
22nd Dec 2011 5:25am
this was a very good write :) love the twist at the end
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re: Nice
22nd Dec 2011 5:53am
Not sure how many times I have read this one
5th Jan 2012 7:32am
It always makes me laugh and leaves me smiling for the longest time. You make sensuality fun and funny all in one. A great write and a great read, keep it up... JJ
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re: Not sure how many times I have read this one
5th Jan 2012 7:56am
Pretty soon my head will be too big to fit though the door if you keep that up. :)
I am amazed that anyone reads something that I wrote more than once. What a great feeling. Thank you so much for your comment!
I am amazed that anyone reads something that I wrote more than once. What a great feeling. Thank you so much for your comment!
re: re: Not sure how many times I have read this one
5th Jan 2012 8:02am
Well, 607 reads... I wonder how many are return readers. Erotic poems always get a bunch of reads, but I have noticed that erotic poems by women get read a whole lot more than the ones guys write, hmmm, I wonder why that is? HA, no I don't, I know why, because we keep coming back to read them again and again. Well, I do anyway. But not 600 times, lol.
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re: that was great
25th Mar 2012 7:25am
interstate pleasure
25th Mar 2012 10:49am
re: interstate pleasure
25th Mar 2012 4:37pm
Fuckin Hot!
Anonymous
24th Apr 2012 10:12am
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re: Fuckin Hot!
24th Apr 2012 4:38pm
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3rd Jun 2012 3:30am
Re: Interstate Pleasure
4th Jun 2012 9:33pm
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4th Jun 2012 9:44pm
Re: Interstate Pleasure
Anonymous
26th Jun 2012 10:18am
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re: Re: Interstate Pleasure
26th Jun 2012 10:37am
Haha, yes, I suppose you are right. That is a great compliment, so I thank you. :)
Re: Interstate Pleasure
30th Oct 2012 2:20pm
I've just now discovered you and your work. I will be reading your other creations over the next several days -and looking forward to them.
On this one, the ending is the perfect fit to tie the poem up neatly. Well done.
On this one, the ending is the perfect fit to tie the poem up neatly. Well done.
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re: Re: Interstate Pleasure
30th Oct 2012 7:36pm