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mercy kill
you got me on a hook
straight through the gills
laid at your boat deck mercy
waiting for the blow that kills
then suddenly I’m lifted up
and I’m examined all around
but I can’t get the hook out
already down for the count
i knew once you got me hooked
when you were dragging me in
i caught just one glance at you
i knew I’d never fight you again
when you pulled me around
after so called stringing me along
i won’t complain on that, baby
here, use the string to my thong
now i’m in big white bucket
and I’m surrounded by minnows
we will all fall to your picking but
can’t say we didn’t get the memo
take the hook out of my mouth
release the hold you have on me
even though you have me hooked
i know I will never again be free
but you got me on a hook
straight through the gills
just take me out of my misery
and we will call it a mercy kill
straight through the gills
laid at your boat deck mercy
waiting for the blow that kills
then suddenly I’m lifted up
and I’m examined all around
but I can’t get the hook out
already down for the count
i knew once you got me hooked
when you were dragging me in
i caught just one glance at you
i knew I’d never fight you again
when you pulled me around
after so called stringing me along
i won’t complain on that, baby
here, use the string to my thong
now i’m in big white bucket
and I’m surrounded by minnows
we will all fall to your picking but
can’t say we didn’t get the memo
take the hook out of my mouth
release the hold you have on me
even though you have me hooked
i know I will never again be free
but you got me on a hook
straight through the gills
just take me out of my misery
and we will call it a mercy kill
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Re. mercy kill
Liv, I chuckled reading this passsage, "we will all fall to your picking but
can’t say we didn’t get the memo "
The fishing metaphor is perfect. I think the thong line is clever...yeah just pull this string to unwrap the package...if that's what you meant...if not then forgive my impropriety.
can’t say we didn’t get the memo "
The fishing metaphor is perfect. I think the thong line is clever...yeah just pull this string to unwrap the package...if that's what you meant...if not then forgive my impropriety.
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18th Jul 2019 5:39am
Haha no, you’re on point! I’m so glad you enjoyed my piece, Gahddess☺️ Thanks so much for stopping in to get a chuckle at my piece and leave kind comments! ❤️
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18th Jul 2019 5:46am
Phew! I worried what if it's a philosophical thong and my baser instincts didn't allow me to see past the sexiness 🙄
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18th Jul 2019 5:55am
Haha no, the hook, despite the idea, is quite.... yummy sometimes to be on, you know what I’m saying? :P
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18th Jul 2019 6:46pm
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18th Jul 2019 7:38pm
haha right, I mean, you’re only on the hook because you can’t resist temptation ;)
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18th Jul 2019 7:52pm
That's true because there isn't necessarily a barb there...based in my experience. BTW I like your new profile pic it catches that wisdom in your aspect. Okay diving Into your latest 😁
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18th Jul 2019 7:54pm
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18th Jul 2019 5:49am
Much prefer catch and release, I got a chuckle reading the part about the string on thong line, I got a mental image of someone flinging a Sandle about on a string, as a thong in Australia is footwear.
Powerful write Liv
Powerful write Liv
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18th Jul 2019 5:56am
Should I edit it to G string? Haha thanks Carpe! I’m glad you got a kick out of it. Thanks for stopping in to read and leave some great feedback! ❤️
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18th Jul 2019 7:28am
Love it ... Who's baiting who though lol ... thong dreams ... Bless and much love ...
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18th Jul 2019 12:24pm
Haha, right? Thanks for the support, Alan, by stopping in for reading and leaving a comment❤️
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18th Jul 2019 12:26pm
Thank you, HF! I really appreciate the kind, and so very true words! Thank you so much for dropping in to read and comment❤️
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18th Jul 2019 12:26pm
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18th Jul 2019 12:46pm
beautiful Liv I feel your pain
in this masterfully written metaphor...
love sometimes sucks I can relate...
love & hugs...
Brenda 🌹
in this masterfully written metaphor...
love sometimes sucks I can relate...
love & hugs...
Brenda 🌹
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18th Jul 2019 1:16pm
Thanks, lovely Brenda dear! It most certainly can be. Thanks so much for reading and commenting❤️ Your words are greatly appreciated.
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18th Jul 2019 1:21pm
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18th Jul 2019 4:56pm
Wow thank you so much. I’m glad you enjoyed it; thanks so much for stopping in to read, leave feedback and for the gracious RL entry! ❤️
Re. mercy kill
18th Jul 2019 1:36pm
I like how you build around your subject
like bait you attract and captivate your prey... hehe
like bait you attract and captivate your prey... hehe
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18th Jul 2019 4:57pm
Haha what can I say? I’m a natural predator🤷🏻♀️ Lol, thanks for the read and comment.
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18th Jul 2019 2:01pm
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Anonymous
18th Jul 2019 5:00pm
Your imagery gets stronger and stronger)...but I can't help but be concerned about "what"you express (rather than "how" you express it). You owe yourself happiness...
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18th Jul 2019 5:02pm
You lost me there, luv. What do you mean what and how? DM me :) I’m curious what you’re speaking of! Thanks for coming to read and comment though, dear❤️
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19th Jul 2019 3:13am
Mmmm, you're making me feel hungry with all this fish talk. The theme stays strong throughout & there are many sad lines in this one. The big white bucket, the contents at the mercy of his choosing is poignant.
Depends how many fish he caught, right? But if he needed a bucket, we can assume it was a lot.
Depends how many fish he caught, right? But if he needed a bucket, we can assume it was a lot.
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19th Jul 2019 3:50am