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The Lights Began To Flicker
Confused in the wind of
a thousand days against
the blue of nothingness
The stone gods
bear witness
as voices are raised
To be among
the few embraced
between the waves
Sinking, to disappear
into canyon fissures
Deeper, than the
shadows
of heaven can reach
Sin upon sin
wades in spume
Then with my body
I wash you clean
From last spring
when I couldn't walk
The palsy of
a prisoner's first sob
A tranquil sorrow
in a dog's rib cage
And now, a morning
so fair and yet, the
gulls are flying inland
There is no reason
what we need to say
It’s all there in silence
like a tomb
So close to the edge
of a conscience
that sleeps in thunder
Unyielding past,
scattered
and mummified
Were you ever
that young
like I never was
I wanted to tell you
not to hold your breath
As I was trying to do
at that moment
turning blue
It never works
Though in time you'll
remember nothing more
when I return to the sea
How much easier
to crawl inside me and
bring the sun with you.
Published 29th Jun 2019
Author's Note
The trophy-winner in the “Esoteric” competition hosted by runaway mindtrain (Jeff).
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29th Jun 2019 1:52pm
Congratulations on a wonderful and deserving win, Jade. That final tercet is absolutely breathtaking imagery.
29th Jun 2019 8:41pm
29th Jun 2019 10:22pm
Obvious to me why this won, it has a tenderness in harmony with the eloquence of it's meter and construction. Your close is literally breathtaking. Wonderful to drink it in a few times, admiring various aspects.
30th Jun 2019 4:21am
Thank you, Daniel, for the touching nod & appreciation of the elements of my work, in addition to the “various aspects“, giving these things a chance from multiple readings. This is seldom expressed by readers in general. So many of your comments over time are as soul food to a poet who’s passion for growth is insatiable.
1st Jul 2019 5:35pm
Aw. *hugs* I'd like to say that my comportment is compulsory in it's professional mien, because, having been on the internet sharing my works for over twenty years, in the long run, it is the best possible position to take, but it doesn't mean I am bereft of unexpressed fondness. I'm always around if you need a friend with a listening ear, who's discretion can be trusted.
1st Jul 2019 7:11pm
29th Jun 2019 10:44pm
This is awesome, Jade {English people use the word 'awesome' sparingly :)) }. Congrats many times over. I love the subtle weaving of varying levels of existence that capture so well an essence of 'esoteric'.
30th Jun 2019 2:29am
Thank you, dear Josh, and oh yes, I too use “awesome” sparingly because it’s entirely overused here. Your compliment is even more so when you DO use it. ( she gets it & grins )😊
And I’m delighted how you’ve connected with the essence & the levels of existence - I’m beside myself.
And I’m delighted how you’ve connected with the essence & the levels of existence - I’m beside myself.
30th Jun 2019 00:48am
As I said when we were discussing this entry, reading this is like viewing a abstract expressionist painting... The longer you spend with it, the more meaning comes through and the greater the emotions it evokes.
Well done!
Well done!
( dreamy sigh )
Gosh, tommy, the reading and then the chat after, made such a difference as you know so well. So many people think a long-time poet should be confident at all times. But if that were so, a person whose artistic passion is everything would stop growing because they’d think they had “arrived”. That’s the worst kind of mindset to have.
It’s good to know we have each other to stay real.
♍️💞♎️
Gosh, tommy, the reading and then the chat after, made such a difference as you know so well. So many people think a long-time poet should be confident at all times. But if that were so, a person whose artistic passion is everything would stop growing because they’d think they had “arrived”. That’s the worst kind of mindset to have.
It’s good to know we have each other to stay real.
♍️💞♎️
30th Jun 2019 1:35am
Your ability to create such detailed imagery never ceases to amaze me. I congratulate for a well-deserved win. You deserve it.
30th Jun 2019 2:34am
Thank you so much, dearest Luna for your appreciation & well wishes. Seeing you again lately has had me...
...over the moon.☺️
🌜🐅
...over the moon.☺️
🌜🐅
3rd Jul 2019 12:18pm
3rd Jul 2019 12:41pm
You’re very welcome, Evan. And thank /you/ for the kind words, and the recommend.
And a warm welcome to the Deep.
~Jade🧜♀️
And a warm welcome to the Deep.
~Jade🧜♀️
3rd Jul 2019 1:27pm
