deepundergroundpoetry.com
SELF LOVE
And know she is alone , desolate
With only memories that taint her mind
But for all that was and come what may
This is destined , this sickness is innate
Nimble fingers , trembling hands ,take the key
And she presses the corner into her skin
Unlocking herself like never before
An overspill of truths trapped within
With the floodgate open, a river runs red
Winding around her arm that falls limp
Carresing her skin with a warm tender touch
She bathes in the solace of everything left unsaid
With only memories that taint her mind
But for all that was and come what may
This is destined , this sickness is innate
Nimble fingers , trembling hands ,take the key
And she presses the corner into her skin
Unlocking herself like never before
An overspill of truths trapped within
With the floodgate open, a river runs red
Winding around her arm that falls limp
Carresing her skin with a warm tender touch
She bathes in the solace of everything left unsaid
Author's Note
-sad truths
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 14
reading list entries 0
comments 25
reads 674
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
16th Jun 2019 11:31am
<< post removed >>
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 11:33am
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
16th Jun 2019 11:53am
<< post removed >>
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 12:02pm
Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 1:04pm
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 1:59pm
Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 1:07pm
Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 1:55pm
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 2:00pm
Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 3:25pm
Quite the spill I really dig this
And love the ending line
"She bathes in the solace of everything left unsaid" excellent and resonates so deeply well done!👏
And love the ending line
"She bathes in the solace of everything left unsaid" excellent and resonates so deeply well done!👏
0
Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 5:33pm
I know You said You're not a Poet
(I used to say that but i people keep encouraging me or admonishing me about it and so i rarely mention it anymore)
But this spill, is EXCELLENT
though very poignant and dark You have expertly painted THE scene for us.
very well spilled
(I used to say that but i people keep encouraging me or admonishing me about it and so i rarely mention it anymore)
But this spill, is EXCELLENT
though very poignant and dark You have expertly painted THE scene for us.
very well spilled
0
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 6:17pm
Really? I diddnt think so...more just an out let but thankyou .thats so kind
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 7:00pm
You remind me of me!
Especially when You respond with
" Really? "
LOL - i still respond like that when someone (especially the Poets i think are super good) thinks my spill is awesome or great or very good...............
Sometimes i catch myself and so maybe i am getting better at accepting the objective compliments
ooooooooooooooooooor i am actually getting better at writing.
I am looking forward to more ink from You : )
Especially when You respond with
" Really? "
LOL - i still respond like that when someone (especially the Poets i think are super good) thinks my spill is awesome or great or very good...............
Sometimes i catch myself and so maybe i am getting better at accepting the objective compliments
ooooooooooooooooooor i am actually getting better at writing.
I am looking forward to more ink from You : )
1
Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 10:20pm
Welcome to Deep Underground Poetry Erinalouisa... I felt this wonderful ink... you have amazing talent with the pen. I hope all is well and your day fill with sunshine
0
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
16th Jun 2019 10:22pm
Re. SELF LOVE
17th Jun 2019 8:10pm
I love how deep this poem gets. For a person who has personally felt like this, the words scream complete understanding. Absolutely LOVE the part “Unlocking herself like never before, An overspill of truths trapped within” that’s exactly how it feels. I love how you capture that in your poem
0
Re. SELF LOVE
17th Jun 2019 8:12pm
Re. SELF LOVE
18th Jun 2019 2:54am
There is a tender vulnerability to your write that is engaging and endearing. There is what seems to me a metaphor for a key unlocking pain, a knife piercing the skin, which creates an interesting and powerful image and innate understanding. Subtle rhyme to your write which counterpoints it's gravitas.
Welcome to the site. I hope you will enjoy your time here. There are many talented people of every stripe to interact with.
Daniel
Welcome to the site. I hope you will enjoy your time here. There are many talented people of every stripe to interact with.
Daniel
1
Re: Re. SELF LOVE
18th Jun 2019 10:08pm
Re. SELF LOVE
18th Jun 2019 12:37pm
the idea is executed beautifully you created such a deep story using such a little amount of words. very beautifully done.
1
Anonymous
- Edited 7th Sep 2022 7:45pm
19th Jun 2019 5:01pm
<< post removed >>
Re. SELF LOVE
27th Jun 2019 6:09am
I just want to hug you, for the sadness but also at how beautiful this is! ❤️
0