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It's yours
I'm with a child
Its yours.
You didn't even say that
To that whore
Your not a man
Don't say I'm wrong
This is a child,
Not a thong.
Stop pretending its not yours.
The test is positively sure.
But don't tell me your not a liar.
You're just another fake deniar.
Its yours.
You didn't even say that
To that whore
Your not a man
Don't say I'm wrong
This is a child,
Not a thong.
Stop pretending its not yours.
The test is positively sure.
But don't tell me your not a liar.
You're just another fake deniar.
Published 11th May 2019
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11th May 2019 7:21pm
When you make love we need expect and accept the beautiful consequences of that love. He is so unlucky not to realize that.
12th May 2019 4:10am
The spelling errors grate, and if some words were excluded ( 'I'm with child vs I'm with a child) this piece would be a powerful punch to the emotional gut.
Anonymous
1st Oct 2019 9:24pm
Strong and excellent!
21st Jul 2024 11:04pm
Is this based on baby daddy's belief he wasn't the father?
Fix- I'm with a child...inechoingsilence told you so. The piece would be powerful but it's not because you had the letter "a" in the poem.
As I say all the time. There all pretentious, self centered assholes here!
Fix- I'm with a child...inechoingsilence told you so. The piece would be powerful but it's not because you had the letter "a" in the poem.
As I say all the time. There all pretentious, self centered assholes here!
22nd Jul 2024 8:23am
Haha I usually just ignore grammar critique. I never liked grammar. Even etymology proves people change grammar all the time. It's all about how you say it and not about how you write it
