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Mr Elling's High Note
Mr Elling's suit
seems right;
an elegance
It fits his
sweet rising notes
He is from Chicago
but does need
steel at his hip
His voice
is lethal
Each note
a threat
to your view
that the last
was the best;
each song
a waltz,
an emotion
Sometimes,
it is almost
too much
Then it is
seems right;
an elegance
It fits his
sweet rising notes
He is from Chicago
but does need
steel at his hip
His voice
is lethal
Each note
a threat
to your view
that the last
was the best;
each song
a waltz,
an emotion
Sometimes,
it is almost
too much
Then it is
Published 7th May 2019
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7th May 2019 12:47pm
Nice poetic character 'profiling'
Honest critique suggest to me I would change:
"but does need
steel at his hip:
... to
'but needs
steel at his hip'
Honest critique suggest to me I would change:
"but does need
steel at his hip:
... to
'but needs
steel at his hip'
