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Fly my spirit
Fly my spirit
free spirit fly
leave my body
........when I die
find the fantasies
that lived in my mind
fulfil the desires
my heart left behind
Fly my spirit
free spirit fly
leave my body
........when I die
guide my loved ones
don't leave them to mourn
light up their lives
keep their hearts warm
Fly my spirit
free spirit fly
leave my body
........when I die
live on forever
follow your quest
when they lay
my body to rest
Fly my spirit
free spirit FLY!
free spirit fly
leave my body
........when I die
find the fantasies
that lived in my mind
fulfil the desires
my heart left behind
Fly my spirit
free spirit fly
leave my body
........when I die
guide my loved ones
don't leave them to mourn
light up their lives
keep their hearts warm
Fly my spirit
free spirit fly
leave my body
........when I die
live on forever
follow your quest
when they lay
my body to rest
Fly my spirit
free spirit FLY!
Published 5th May 2019
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5th May 2019 6:51pm
A good start, Frank, you’re off & flying.
I love your avatar image by the way.
~Jade
I love your avatar image by the way.
~Jade
5th May 2019 7:22pm
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7th May 2019 3:56am
7th May 2019 2:25am
Hi, Frank_V
Welcome to DUP. Great to see you on the other side of the fence!
If this early piece is anything by which to judge, I'd say you deserve advanced standing. How lyrical -- as if it were intended to be a song. The ABCBDEFE rhyme scheme gives an easy lilt that propels the poem forward. Moreover, the opening chorus, as it moves from verse to verse, unifies the whole.
I am looking forward to seeing more of your work as you find you way around these DUP precincts.
Best wishes!
Sincerely
cab
Welcome to DUP. Great to see you on the other side of the fence!
If this early piece is anything by which to judge, I'd say you deserve advanced standing. How lyrical -- as if it were intended to be a song. The ABCBDEFE rhyme scheme gives an easy lilt that propels the poem forward. Moreover, the opening chorus, as it moves from verse to verse, unifies the whole.
I am looking forward to seeing more of your work as you find you way around these DUP precincts.
Best wishes!
Sincerely
cab
7th May 2019 3:58am
Thank you Cab!
You're right, it feels a bit like a song. Been lingering in my head for days after writing it.
Grtz,
Frank
You're right, it feels a bit like a song. Been lingering in my head for days after writing it.
Grtz,
Frank
9th May 2019 3:33am
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- Edited 22nd Feb 2020 6:45am
10th May 2019 6:18pm
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