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If I'm gonna be honest, i might as well cut the modesty.
Sometimes I wish someone would come solder my artistry in a bottled dream.
Slaughter the art in me, sever my arteries.
Take all these parts of me and rip them apart from me.
Shoot me with my sorrows and watch me bleed poetry,
In my blood is written another story of "woe is me."
Because supposedly I was supposed to be a prodigal son.
But I knew that wasn't the case when I found out I wasn't the biological one.
Sometimes I wish someone would come solder my artistry in a bottled dream.
Slaughter the art in me, sever my arteries.
Take all these parts of me and rip them apart from me.
Shoot me with my sorrows and watch me bleed poetry,
In my blood is written another story of "woe is me."
Because supposedly I was supposed to be a prodigal son.
But I knew that wasn't the case when I found out I wasn't the biological one.
Published 22nd Apr 2019
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22nd Apr 2019 9:29pm
"Because supposedly I was supposed to be a prodigal son.
But I knew that wasn't the case when I found out I wasn't the biological one."
I love these last two lines. Nice write x
But I knew that wasn't the case when I found out I wasn't the biological one."
I love these last two lines. Nice write x
22nd Apr 2019 11:50pm
Thank you, tons. Hopefully I can stay on track. I've been falling out in a way with my writing.🤒
It happens to the best of us ha ha I hadn't been writing consistently for a few years and it took me some time to find my footing again. Even if I'm not posting, I find it's helpful to write things down that I find inspiring x
If it's worth any consolation, I really enjoy your poetry so I hope you'll keep posting
If it's worth any consolation, I really enjoy your poetry so I hope you'll keep posting
23rd Apr 2019 2:45am
I really appreciate what you just said to me. and how long have you been writing for? I've only just started really.
23rd Apr 2019 1:38pm
Most of my life, but not consistently ha ha but everyone starts somewhere so keep it up x
22nd Apr 2019 10:16pm
This poem is powerful. I like the line:
Shoot me with my sorrows and watch me bleed poetry,
Shoot me with my sorrows and watch me bleed poetry,
22nd Apr 2019 11:54pm
I appreciate that. I try to write from raw emotions. It's why sometimes my poems get a little choppy, I can be an emotional wreck sometimes.
23rd Apr 2019 1:43am
Your welcome. I did not find it choppy at all. I often reaarange my lines as im thinking, but never changing the actual poem. Everyone has their own unique way of writing. I like This poem the way it is. I believe you can't edit raw emotions, you can only edit fiction.
23rd Apr 2019 2:49am
5th May 2019 8:35pm
I'm gonna be honest too,
this spill is very well done.
The flow and arrangement made for an enjoyable read
though the content not so much.
this spill is very well done.
The flow and arrangement made for an enjoyable read
though the content not so much.
