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It's Just Not Fair
The smell of diesel fumes mixes uneasily
With the scent of hot dogs with mustard
Onion perfume and a distinct smell of hamburgers
And plastic cheese adds a certain something
The aroma of cotton candy wafts past in
Diabetic clouds of pink and white sugars
Your sense of smell now has multi-personality disorder
Trying to separate odours
Your vision is flooded initially your sight has a
Sensual breakdown so much brightness
So much going on gaudy colours, brightly
Coloured flashing lights, strobe and laser
My eyes adjust into a smile and genuine enjoyment
Of the nature of light in the dark
A circus clown painted on a metal wall has
A flashing nose, red of course, he beckons
My ears are lambasted with a myriad of
Multi-genre music explosion in my head
Madonna blares “like a virgin.” but she is so
Clearly not a virgin; not even close, mixes
Uneasily with Chuck Berries, “Johnny Be Goode.”
In addition, the House of Pain’s “Jump Around.”
All to loud competing into white noise
Dodgems, carousels, speedway, ghost train
The big wheel, hall of mirrors, slots go Ka-ching,
Firing range, hoop-la, hook a duck, raffle tickets,
Coconut shy, chairoplanes, mallet ring the bell,
Roustabouts shouting welcomes, “Come on in.”
Children crying to get on and when taken off
Screaming customers scream and almost cream
Pools of vomit chugged up by cavorting bellies
With hotdogs, cotton candy, strangely carrots
All senses overload nearing mental breakdown
Being dragged under protest to the fairground
Is just not fair
Published 7th Apr 2019
| Edited 9th May 2019
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7th Apr 2019 10:46am
Very descriptive of what we remembered of a fair. It's been a long time since our last visit, but yes we remember this. Very tight write
9th Apr 2019 4:48am
7th Apr 2019 2:30pm
You've got a much better observant memory than me - but was nicely jolted to remember back in time. Nice write.
9th Apr 2019 4:50am
My long term memory is pretty good, it's just my short term that's fucked LOL
thank you :-))))))))))))))))))))))
thank you :-))))))))))))))))))))))
Anonymous
7th Apr 2019 2:54pm
Skäl !!
Bear Hugs my friend.
Good stuff
Bear Hugs my friend.
Good stuff
9th Apr 2019 4:52am
Oh WoW... there's sooo much there...
one gets whapped with it all at once,
'tween the eyeballs
for which one was hardly prepared
then straight to the brain... brain... brain...
Ely
one gets whapped with it all at once,
'tween the eyeballs
for which one was hardly prepared
then straight to the brain... brain... brain...
Ely
9th Apr 2019 4:56am
LOL, I have a vivid long term memory, short term is kinda poor - who are you again????
(((((((((( Hugs ))))))))))
(((((((((( Hugs ))))))))))
Damn...that middlle line got hopelessly entangled...the poltergeist in my tablet has re-appeared...with a vengeance it seems... but that's another story... hugs back, Bro
PS...OK...think that fixed it...I feel sooo much, much better.Ely
PS...OK...think that fixed it...I feel sooo much, much better.Ely
8th Apr 2019 4:16am
9th Apr 2019 5:01am
Anonymous
8th Apr 2019 5:14pm
It's a bit of a sensory overload, to be sure. But I have some incredible memories of the State Fair here. But yeah, not sure I could go anymore at this point. Too much. You packed a lot in this poem, my friend. Flooded my memories, ya did. Big huge hugs!!! :-)
9th Apr 2019 5:02am
13th Oct 2019 1:53am
A great job of taking me back to those nights of enjoyment as a child and then as a parent myself within the worries of having children in such chaos. Your detailed descriptions meshes with all of the senses, ultimately transporting your readers...Even in all it's raping of the senses and unfairness..you sword a Fun pen!!
13th Oct 2019 2:03am
Thank you so very much - my memories of this were certainly sweet and sour. Moving from childhood to teenage
