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Next Year’s Spring
( a Lewis Carroll-type rhyme )
As next year’s spring came yesterday
Right in the middle of the night,
Awake while dreaming as I laid,
I gazed up at all the starlight
Across the ceiling that shimmered
In the shrinking world of my jail.
The wings of a raven glimmered,
I reached up to take hold its tail
And was lifted up as it cawed,
And we flew thru’ the window bars.
I thought “If we get to meet God,
And what must it be like on Mars?”
So I called out with all my might.
The raven flew higher and sang
On the way up to heaven’s flight
Thru’ clouds o’er a moon of meringue.
Photo by Lewis Carroll (1874)
NaPoGloPoWriMo 2019
As next year’s spring came yesterday
Right in the middle of the night,
Awake while dreaming as I laid,
I gazed up at all the starlight
Across the ceiling that shimmered
In the shrinking world of my jail.
The wings of a raven glimmered,
I reached up to take hold its tail
And was lifted up as it cawed,
And we flew thru’ the window bars.
I thought “If we get to meet God,
And what must it be like on Mars?”
So I called out with all my might.
The raven flew higher and sang
On the way up to heaven’s flight
Thru’ clouds o’er a moon of meringue.
Photo by Lewis Carroll (1874)
NaPoGloPoWriMo 2019
Author's Note
Day Three of Thirty
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Re. Next Year’s Spring
3rd Apr 2019 11:41am
I really like it Jade, the body might be caged but the mind still fly's free
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Re. Next Year’s Spring
Absolutely beautiful, Jade. * sigh * to the time period you captured. <3
ETA..as was your message just as captivating
ETA..as was your message just as captivating
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Thank you, my sister, ohh how lovely you’ve let in the spirit of my little write.📝
Jadey🌌
Jadey🌌
Re. Next Year’s Spring
3rd Apr 2019 12:46pm
Jade this is absolutely lovely and possesses a fairytale quality that is delightfully light while adhering to the foundations of poetry. Well done!
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3rd Apr 2019 1:07pm
Thank you, dear Sage, for this gift. I felt so fortune as the piece reveaIed itself. I was living it with each stroke of my virtual quill.
Jadey🌌
Jadey🌌
Re. Next Year’s Spring
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3rd Apr 2019 12:58pm
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Re: Re. Next Year’s Spring
3rd Apr 2019 1:12pm
Why thank you, darling Sky sister, as your spritely dance flirts with the constellations! x
Jadey🌌
Jadey🌌
Re. Next Year’s Spring
3rd Apr 2019 2:40pm
I love it, Jadey -
from Carroll's pictured Alice to rise of raven's wing -
Over the Moon!
tommy
from Carroll's pictured Alice to rise of raven's wing -
Over the Moon!
tommy
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Re: Re. Next Year’s Spring
4th Apr 2019 1:45pm
Thank you, my dear Cheshire-esque tomcat. And you know how blessed I feel the way I was inspired, and didn’t fully understand until you enlightened me after my recitation!
Jadey🐾💗
Jadey🐾💗
Re. Next Year’s Spring
3rd Apr 2019 8:51pm
"Thru’ clouds o’er a moon of meringue."
that final line is especially soooo Lewis Carroll - and an intriguing rhyme-partner to 'sang'. Lovely done.
that final line is especially soooo Lewis Carroll - and an intriguing rhyme-partner to 'sang'. Lovely done.
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Re: Re. Next Year’s Spring
4th Apr 2019 1:51pm
Thank you, Josh... and when the end came to me just that way, I was want for nothing, so glad for the gift.
Jadey🙏🏻
Jadey🙏🏻
Re. Next Year’s Spring
3rd Apr 2019 10:37pm
Being a bibliophile by nature...philosophy...poetry etc...my students often ask about my favorite authors, texts...I always tell them, A.A. Milne, Zhuangzi and naturally, Mr Lewis Carroll. Superb ink J...left me with a cheshire smile.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. Next Year’s Spring
4th Apr 2019 1:56pm
Oh Harry, what a wonderful surprise of your visit, thank you for coming in for a read.
I’m very touched for your thoughts, it means a lot. I’m over the moon.
Jadey🙏🏻
I’m very touched for your thoughts, it means a lot. I’m over the moon.
Jadey🙏🏻
Re. Next Year’s Spring
4th Apr 2019 11:59am
Carroll - esque it might be in it's design but in it's creativity and succulent layers it's all you Jadey. Great write! David x
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Re: Re. Next Year’s Spring
4th Apr 2019 2:04pm
Why thank you, David, for the words of honor you bestow... to this humble pen-pusher.😌
Jadey📚✍🏻
Jadey📚✍🏻