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I Don't Even Have A Title For This
Into twinkling blues, a kaleidoscope peers
Spring
Such promise it used to bring
Another foreboding war to conquer
Confined
Battling with four walls as my tiring view
Another hibernation as I wait & wish
Summer
Can possibly trade somber for solace
All my days, will the shitshow still reign
Winter
Is infinite; my body & soul to never renew
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- Edited 30th May 2019 3:51pm
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20th Mar 2019 2:28am
Re. I Don't Even Have A Title For This
19th Mar 2019 10:44pm
Great write pandy I'm feeling this one deeply
"Another foreboding war to conquer
Confined
Battling with four walls as my tiring view" so relatable and so well written
"Another foreboding war to conquer
Confined
Battling with four walls as my tiring view" so relatable and so well written
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20th Mar 2019 2:29am
Re. I Don't Even Have A Title For This
19th Mar 2019 10:50pm
Until spring and summer come to flesh life's dry bones (thinking of the Ezekiel vision and that spiritual song All Dem Dry Bones).
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20th Mar 2019 2:31am
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19th Mar 2019 10:53pm
sadness to read sadness to bear love will appear when looking in the mirror when the reflection looks back through the eyes
peace and harmony meet their
new title peace and harmony
peace and harmony meet their
new title peace and harmony
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20th Mar 2019 2:32am
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Anonymous
19th Mar 2019 11:03pm
Pandora.. felt this deeply.. in my list it belongs.. much respect..
Dave
Dave
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20th Mar 2019 2:31am
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19th Mar 2019 11:37pm
I can feel the isolation in this. And the longing that the next season could free you, but sadly won't. I think that title works well. Big hug!
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20th Mar 2019 2:33am
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20th Mar 2019 8:48am
Re. I Don't Even Have A Title For This
20th Mar 2019 6:14am
Always have to keep up that fight. Though you never have to face them alone 😉.
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20th Mar 2019 8:50am
You're awesome. Thank you for being such a good friend. Remembering the upcoming force meant a lot..;) <3
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20th Mar 2019 7:58am
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20th Mar 2019 8:51am
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20th Mar 2019 4:56pm
Thank you, love. Sometimes there's strength and others, nothing. Hugs to you & hopes you keep your own.🖤
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Re. I Don't Even Have A Title For This
A wonderful write, Pandora. One detail: instead of "shitshow" I would use "sideshow." I think that would better fit the overall tone of the poem. But I'm nitpicking. Terrific job!
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20th Mar 2019 8:03pm
Thank you, crow. I'm better today & yesterday, shitshow was soooo damn appropriate. I always rise. Thank you for the RL honor too!!
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20th Mar 2019 8:07pm
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21st Mar 2019 3:32am
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20th Mar 2019 8:01pm
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20th Mar 2019 8:06pm
Thank you, Tim. Mine is long over due, but I just have to throw the armor back on.;) Hugs back from that comment on yours, I forgot.
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20th Mar 2019 8:09pm
Your writing never ceases to amaze from emotional to erotic...and remember who coined the nick "pandy" :P
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21st Mar 2019 3:36am
I thought it was Matty but yes, I think it was you..we've both evolved so much since even my start here. Thank you..if I could only get my my syllables under control & lose 20 words to a verse so I could master a sonnet.;)
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Anonymous
21st Mar 2019 6:38am
''Battling with four walls as my tiring view ''
those ever encroaching four walls...
can be very exhausting ...
powerful write
those ever encroaching four walls...
can be very exhausting ...
powerful write
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21st Mar 2019 7:17am
Thank you. My badass spirit is back today..
Not completely but there's no choice but to deal & that I'll do..☺
Not completely but there's no choice but to deal & that I'll do..☺
Re. I Don't Even Have A Title For This
21st Mar 2019 8:17pm
Dearest Pandora, this touched a raw wound that I know will never heal. I too long for spring but find myself in an endless cycle of winter. But I keep the faith that life will flourish within me once again, and send love your way to help renew, body and soul.
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21st Mar 2019 11:04pm
Well, then...we're soul sisters! Thanks for the support & letting me know. Keep the faith. I lose it often, but I just haven't caught a break in 3 years. I'm gonna be positive as I send a hug and wish you finally do. You deserve it, love.💖
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22nd Mar 2019 2:35am
Thank you once again. I wish I could give your comments the praise they deserve. I'm indebted most definitely...