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Your Blooms Use Too Much Water
The lurch rush of a bus
when you haven't yet sat
Gutfall, guttural, gruff
upset
Vanilla over roads
though a will is moreso potent
Fragrance forms, roughspun fiber
extracts exacted
you exalt your airs
you bow to an empty,
a nothing
The top note heart
in want of mind
and maturation
when you haven't yet sat
Gutfall, guttural, gruff
upset
Vanilla over roads
though a will is moreso potent
Fragrance forms, roughspun fiber
extracts exacted
you exalt your airs
you bow to an empty,
a nothing
The top note heart
in want of mind
and maturation
Published 12th Feb 2019
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12th Feb 2019 3:18pm
Excellent offering, Mikaila. There is only one stanza that stooped me:
you exalt your airs
you bow to an empty
a nothing
a nothing?
you exalt your airs
you bow to an empty
a nothing
a nothing?
12th Feb 2019 8:11pm
Yes! :) I kind of wanted it to be purposefully jarring. I'll add a comma actually...
Thank you so much! <3
Thank you so much! <3
12th Feb 2019 8:36pm
Now, that's a poem.....not all that obvious, yet sublime
Note: I put it on my read list, but they Aha's pic on it
Note: I put it on my read list, but they Aha's pic on it
