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'B'eing
From Boston to Montana,
wearing a bright blue bandana
in a boxcar of bovine I rode
strumming my benevolent banjo
with brevity, gave a hand-show
during a brush with this noisy cargo
Written by
TIG
Published 14th Jan 2019
Author's Note
B happy, MadameLavenders B comp
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Re. 'B'eing
14th Jan 2019 5:09pm
Very visually stimulating: a wonderful use of imagery. I'm loving your alliteration, and am happy to see the word benevolent in a poem (one of my favorites). I quite enjoyed the poem; nice comp TIG & MadameLavender!
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Re. 'B'eing
15th Jan 2019 1:47pm
Thank you for such a nice response and for enlightening me to the word "alliteration". I had not fully understood the 'relation of my redundancy' of letters?
Re. 'B'eing
Anonymous
16th Jan 2019 1:50am
Hey TIG.......luv your imagination of this ride....... wry visual and made me laugh.....good luck in the comp......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. 'B'eing
16th Jan 2019 3:23pm
I so appreciate your comments and glad you enjoyed it, felt a certain sense of playfulness as I wrote it.
Re. 'B'eing
16th Jan 2019 9:36am
Wow a super cool jaunty poem I enjoyed so much. I like how u rhymed it with bandana yay. Kudos for this fantastic piece.
Plz do review/comment my newest poem too,
Plz do review/comment my newest poem too,
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Re: Re. 'B'eing
16th Jan 2019 3:35pm
Re. 'B'eing
16th Jan 2019 10:24am
Re: Re. 'B'eing
16th Jan 2019 3:37pm
Ha, I kind of had some of that imagery while I spilled this one.
Hope all things are good with you brother.Check out MadameLavenders new series of comps, it is kind of fun!
Hope all things are good with you brother.Check out MadameLavenders new series of comps, it is kind of fun!
Re. 'B'eing
16th Jan 2019 5:32pm
Re: Re. 'B'eing
16th Jan 2019 9:40pm
..."life I love is making music with my friends, it's good to be back upon...."
Yeah I get that. thanks for the read and comment
Yeah I get that. thanks for the read and comment
Re. 'B'eing
Anonymous
17th Jan 2019 5:46pm
Such a wonderful write. Loved it.
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Re: Re. 'B'eing
17th Jan 2019 5:54pm
Re: Re. 'B'eing
Anonymous
17th Jan 2019 5:56pm
You are so welcome.
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