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Tasting Metaphor
Be my new chapter
Let me taste your Metaphors
Ligature literature
Into submission x rated edition
Let me read between your lines
Don’t get stuck on 69
I’ma page turner
I’ve bent spines like paperbacks
Wrote happy endings in volumes
Had to muffle her volume 😏
F*ck “50 Shades”
My climax is simile
Smile like “50 Sheets of Saturation” 💦
Alliteration
make you lick your ...bookmark
Mid Masturbation,
moan manuscript, like masterpiece
This is Shakespeare Scrambled
Provocative Printed Poison ☠️
As if foot notes made toes curl
And index was finger
Penned Poetic like Quatrains
can’t abstain
How can we not make love in Haiku
Italic she fell 5
Silenced letters with glances 7
Paragraphs press pause 5
Chapter 2
IG: Nourish_Cruz
Let me taste your Metaphors
Ligature literature
Into submission x rated edition
Let me read between your lines
Don’t get stuck on 69
I’ma page turner
I’ve bent spines like paperbacks
Wrote happy endings in volumes
Had to muffle her volume 😏
F*ck “50 Shades”
My climax is simile
Smile like “50 Sheets of Saturation” 💦
Alliteration
make you lick your ...bookmark
Mid Masturbation,
moan manuscript, like masterpiece
This is Shakespeare Scrambled
Provocative Printed Poison ☠️
As if foot notes made toes curl
And index was finger
Penned Poetic like Quatrains
can’t abstain
How can we not make love in Haiku
Italic she fell 5
Silenced letters with glances 7
Paragraphs press pause 5
Chapter 2
IG: Nourish_Cruz
Published 27th Nov 2018
| Edited 7th Mar 2019
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27th Nov 2018 8:00pm
Very erotic sensual passion my dear...Your imagery enters one's mind imagination with boundless images...🌹🐺😊
28th Nov 2018 6:12pm
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27th Nov 2018 10:06pm
28th Nov 2018 6:12pm
15th Dec 2018 2:42pm
fun to write ... fun to read, with lots of alliteration! I do like a little alliteration.
In the spirit of honest critique:
1) A minor point. Some words are unexpectedly written with an initial capital such as Poetic like Quatrains, Metaphor and Masturbation (unless there's a specific reason for the initial capital, but if there was, then this isn't clear).
2) Not sure about using emoji in poems ... but on the other hand - why not!?
3) "into submission x rated edition" might be better as "into submission - 'X' rated edition "
4) "Italicized she fell" has six syllables, I think. Perhaps use "Italics! She fell" or "Emboldened, she fell"
Anyway, these are all minor points and did not detract in the slightest from my enjoyment of this sexily fun poem
In the spirit of honest critique:
1) A minor point. Some words are unexpectedly written with an initial capital such as Poetic like Quatrains, Metaphor and Masturbation (unless there's a specific reason for the initial capital, but if there was, then this isn't clear).
2) Not sure about using emoji in poems ... but on the other hand - why not!?
3) "into submission x rated edition" might be better as "into submission - 'X' rated edition "
4) "Italicized she fell" has six syllables, I think. Perhaps use "Italics! She fell" or "Emboldened, she fell"
Anyway, these are all minor points and did not detract in the slightest from my enjoyment of this sexily fun poem
15th Dec 2018 4:37pm
I need a proof reader for sure! I am more focused on writing. I usually bomb punctuation and proper caps. I want to publish but I definitely need someone who has time to help me with all those things.
15th Dec 2018 5:29pm
