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Raw
Tonight, don’t take it away,
You feeling you can save us.
Don’t look back we have no home,
It’s just me you’re with tonight.
So pull them apart, hear it?
The last stitch of red silk split.
You can leave them hanging there,
A souvenir of conquest.
Now all you do is earn it,
Mmm, I’ll cum at any price.
She won’t do you like I do,
Gawd, you’re not just any man.
Make me raw on the outside
As I feel on the inside.
We won’t think of tomorrow,
Not while we rut - nothin’s left.
Take your time, my alley stray,
We got all night, sleep all day.
Make your move deliberately,
Twist that hip and send it deep.
You’ll see daylight when I arch,
And the gleam of satin pearls.
Lick it all up in your mouth,
Let me see it on your tongue.
You can tell where my eyes go,
That I know you’ll give me some.
As we swallow we both think
That it’s time to fuck again.
Make me raw on the outside
As I feel on the inside.
We won’t think of tomorrow,
Not while we rut - nothin’s left.
You feeling you can save us.
Don’t look back we have no home,
It’s just me you’re with tonight.
So pull them apart, hear it?
The last stitch of red silk split.
You can leave them hanging there,
A souvenir of conquest.
Now all you do is earn it,
Mmm, I’ll cum at any price.
She won’t do you like I do,
Gawd, you’re not just any man.
Make me raw on the outside
As I feel on the inside.
We won’t think of tomorrow,
Not while we rut - nothin’s left.
Take your time, my alley stray,
We got all night, sleep all day.
Make your move deliberately,
Twist that hip and send it deep.
You’ll see daylight when I arch,
And the gleam of satin pearls.
Lick it all up in your mouth,
Let me see it on your tongue.
You can tell where my eyes go,
That I know you’ll give me some.
As we swallow we both think
That it’s time to fuck again.
Make me raw on the outside
As I feel on the inside.
We won’t think of tomorrow,
Not while we rut - nothin’s left.
Author's Note
No rhyme scheme, just a nice, easy 7-syllable line count, staying in the groove.
This one’s loose, but nice & tight in all the right places.
This one’s loose, but nice & tight in all the right places.
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Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 1:25pm
Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 9:00pm
*finger-snap!*
*hand-clap!*
*turns around, bends over, showin’ off her hand-stamped “PS Approved” just above her sweet spot*
) .. (
( ❣️ )
*hand-clap!*
*turns around, bends over, showin’ off her hand-stamped “PS Approved” just above her sweet spot*
) .. (
( ❣️ )
Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 10:18pm
Re. Raw
Anonymous
24th Oct 2018 1:44pm
Blimey that is raw. Kind of erotica I enjoy reading. Sexy with a human touch. Excellent write JP.
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Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 9:07pm
Thank you, dear Rob. My sweet Welshman, kindred poet & wearer of heart-on-a-sleeve.
~Jade x
~Jade x
Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 2:18pm
All night long - until dawn and sleep consume ... OK, maybe, until noon and sleep consume!
WOW!
I love it!
tomcat
WOW!
I love it!
tomcat
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Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 9:13pm
Mmhmm. But...
What if we find ourselves once more at evening’s open door as sleep releases?
*sighs*
What to do what to do...
🌜🔥
What if we find ourselves once more at evening’s open door as sleep releases?
*sighs*
What to do what to do...
🌜🔥
Re: Re. Raw
25th Oct 2018 1:08pm
Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 3:07pm
" We got all night, sleep all day. " <--- Love that line!
I Feel exhausted a bit after finishing the read. Good Job ;)
I Feel exhausted a bit after finishing the read. Good Job ;)
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Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 3:23pm
Why thank you, poet, for coming by for an invigorating read, no?
And but of course you’re fatigued, you must pace yourself.
And but of course you’re fatigued, you must pace yourself.
Re. Raw
Anonymous
24th Oct 2018 3:41pm
Wow, Jade! That's deeply sensual, while not overly explicit.
Awesome writing, my friend!
Matthew.
Awesome writing, my friend!
Matthew.
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Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 9:18pm
Thank you, Matthew, most kind, and very sweet.
I see you’re able to blink again.
~Jade🤫
I see you’re able to blink again.
~Jade🤫
Re: Re. Raw
Anonymous
24th Oct 2018 9:25pm
Lol!! Yes, finally!! I'm going to get seriously injured reading your exotics!
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Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 9:24pm
*smiles sweetly*
Why thank you, dear Lawrence.
*softly croons...*
Groovin’ - on a Sunday afternoon...*
Why thank you, dear Lawrence.
*softly croons...*
Groovin’ - on a Sunday afternoon...*
Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 5:44pm
WARNING!!!
Jade's poem, RAW, is so hot reading it may cause your contact lenses to melt.
🔥 OWWWCH🙈
Jade's poem, RAW, is so hot reading it may cause your contact lenses to melt.
🔥 OWWWCH🙈
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Re: Re. Raw
24th Oct 2018 8:50pm
Re. Raw
25th Oct 2018 9:09pm
This is absolutely spicy, Jade! Dammit, now you've got me desiring such an act. I'd be incredibly raw, since it's been a while, haha. xD
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Re: Re. Raw
25th Oct 2018 10:54pm
Oh my goodness, sweet light..,
that excites me.
Thank you! (for your wonderful comment, I mean)🤤
🌜🐅
that excites me.
Thank you! (for your wonderful comment, I mean)🤤
🌜🐅
Re. Raw
26th Oct 2018 10:17am
I like it... Raw
I just enjoyed those lines. You are good. wish I could write like you.
I just enjoyed those lines. You are good. wish I could write like you.
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Re: Re. Raw
26th Oct 2018 10:15pm
Why thank you, Markis, for your generous comment, and the honor of your reader’s embrace of my ink.
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Re. Raw
7th Nov 2018 1:35am
Your playful mastery of form and inspiration is intoxicating. Each time I read you it boosts me in more than one way. ;-)
John
John
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Re: Re. Raw
Thank you so much, John...
What a pleasure it is.
Such a treasure will be,
When I pen the color purple
To undress the real me.
💜
What a pleasure it is.
Such a treasure will be,
When I pen the color purple
To undress the real me.
💜