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There is no end, only beginning that do not yet exist
Because if there are no ends how will they be missed
Life is the never ending story told of tragedy and pain
In some ways our stories are different but still the same
There are many trials that we must face everyday
Whether we are Goth or Christian or even gay
So do not judge someone on how you think they will end
Love themm for who they are and how they begin
Because if there are no ends how will they be missed
Life is the never ending story told of tragedy and pain
In some ways our stories are different but still the same
There are many trials that we must face everyday
Whether we are Goth or Christian or even gay
So do not judge someone on how you think they will end
Love themm for who they are and how they begin
Published 2nd Nov 2011
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Wonderful sentiment here! One with which I fully agree. A few notes:
1- Line 1, beginnings should be plural.
2- Watch your spacing. You have some places that are more than double-spaced and it breaks up the piece's fluidity.
3- You don't have to capitalize every line. It actually takes away from the flow because the brain thinks they are separate lines and therefore separate thoughts.
4- The 'them' in the last line should only have one 'm.'
One opinion: if you added more line breaks, it would come across better and add impact to your points.
Overall, a great read, so give it a title!
(P.s. I really like your screen name)
1- Line 1, beginnings should be plural.
2- Watch your spacing. You have some places that are more than double-spaced and it breaks up the piece's fluidity.
3- You don't have to capitalize every line. It actually takes away from the flow because the brain thinks they are separate lines and therefore separate thoughts.
4- The 'them' in the last line should only have one 'm.'
One opinion: if you added more line breaks, it would come across better and add impact to your points.
Overall, a great read, so give it a title!
(P.s. I really like your screen name)
