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Story Poem, Nr.05 — She ...
... sits in a cloud of feeling
surrounding mythical figures -
the world shrinks
and fades to its own particulars;
her house is huge, a mansion and beyond
as time, her ally, stretches lazily
the rain bringing only reminders
of a play, sitting comfortably
beyond average borders.
surrounding mythical figures -
the world shrinks
and fades to its own particulars;
her house is huge, a mansion and beyond
as time, her ally, stretches lazily
the rain bringing only reminders
of a play, sitting comfortably
beyond average borders.
Published 1st Oct 2018
| Edited 8th Mar 2024
Author's Note
For the "A Picture Holds A Thousand Words #1" competition hosted by LunasChild8
(photo credit: not via me; probably from the commons, code: 321979)
(photo credit: not via me; probably from the commons, code: 321979)
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1st Oct 2018 8:50pm
Thank you Crowfly. I've been looking at this image on-and-off for over two weeks now trying to tap into some inspiration. Today it came. Thank you for the RL
Anonymous
1st Oct 2018 9:00pm
I'm really enjoying the different poems on this image. Great peek into her existence :-)
1st Oct 2018 9:03pm
1st Oct 2018 9:04pm
1st Oct 2018 9:08pm
Thank you once again Ahavati for passing by and commenting in such a succinct and positive manner (as always). :))
1st Oct 2018 9:12pm
1st Oct 2018 9:17pm
Thank you SweetOblivion; it was a case of staring at this photo lots of times, getting frustrated I couldn't thinking of anything to write - and then suddenly today it all came tumbling out.
1st Oct 2018 9:24pm
1st Oct 2018 10:10pm
She sits in a cloud of feeling...what a marvelous first line... really enjoyed this Josh
1st Oct 2018 10:38pm
Hi JusTim, thanks for reading and commenting. Originally I had "She sits in a cloud of knowing" and it bugged me something wasn't right. It was only when uploading it onto DUP and I was hesitating to press the 'submit' button that it hit me what it needed changing to. Funny that, you stare at things for ages and miss what you're after - then suddenly it's there.
2nd Oct 2018 7:18am
This is amazing, Josh!
Like you I went to that competition many times, she's a mysterious lady...
I really enjoyed reading this and I agree with Tim on the first line... so beautiful!
Like you I went to that competition many times, she's a mysterious lady...
I really enjoyed reading this and I agree with Tim on the first line... so beautiful!
2nd Oct 2018 1:50pm
Thank you Duende, I realise just now I forgot to upload it into the competition (now closed). Never mind, it was fun doing it. As my grandmother was fond of saying: 'it doesn't matter whether you win or lose but how you play the game'.
