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Illegal
While you don’t notice, I look hard at you.
You smell illegal rising from my sex.
And dare not make eye contact not you too,
Fuck, not the way we are & how we flex.
I lock onto you with a sonar blip,
That resonates & ripples through your cock.
Instead of pearls that glisten from the tip,
The precum hasn’t room to go: soaked crotch.
There isn’t need for tease we know it’s bad,
Your crave of oral twenty-four you would.
Yet tease is what makes it the best I’ve had,
I can’t help wanting it when it’s so good.
And now, the point of no return is near.
You’re fast upon me, lay me back & duck,
With fingers pulling wide my fleshy lips.
Your mouth draws on my labia - you suck,
Your nose is up against my clitoris!
Before I go delirious, a thought,
Just as your fingers fill both holes in pairs:
A tease might shorten oral might it not?
But I don’t care I don’t care I don’t care!!
You smell illegal rising from my sex.
And dare not make eye contact not you too,
Fuck, not the way we are & how we flex.
I lock onto you with a sonar blip,
That resonates & ripples through your cock.
Instead of pearls that glisten from the tip,
The precum hasn’t room to go: soaked crotch.
There isn’t need for tease we know it’s bad,
Your crave of oral twenty-four you would.
Yet tease is what makes it the best I’ve had,
I can’t help wanting it when it’s so good.
And now, the point of no return is near.
You’re fast upon me, lay me back & duck,
With fingers pulling wide my fleshy lips.
Your mouth draws on my labia - you suck,
Your nose is up against my clitoris!
Before I go delirious, a thought,
Just as your fingers fill both holes in pairs:
A tease might shorten oral might it not?
But I don’t care I don’t care I don’t care!!
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 20th Sep 2018
Author's Note
Written for & entered in the Deep competition “The Joy of Giving”, hosted by Medinda.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Illegal
20th Sep 2018 4:54pm
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20th Sep 2018 5:16pm
Re. Illegal
20th Sep 2018 6:04pm
Very erotic, Jade, with a leavening of humor:
You’re fast upon me, lay me back & duck,
With fingers pulling wide my fleshy lips.
Your mouth draws on my labia - you suck,
Your nose is up against my clitoris!
Intense detailing here, all exquisitely done. This read is so much fun!
You’re fast upon me, lay me back & duck,
With fingers pulling wide my fleshy lips.
Your mouth draws on my labia - you suck,
Your nose is up against my clitoris!
Intense detailing here, all exquisitely done. This read is so much fun!
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Re: Re. Illegal
21st Sep 2018 2:28am
Thank you so much, my friend! It was fun for me too, as you can imagine. I’m glad you dropped by for a read.
Re. Illegal
20th Sep 2018 7:23pm
'there comes a tide in the affairs of men (and women)' taken at its flow"...to quote Shakespeare...tidal rush of sensuality here...loved it...
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Re: Re. Illegal
21st Sep 2018 2:31am
Gosh, thank you, Lawrence. Wow. Quoting the Bard when it comes to my exotic ink, now that’s some honor. I’m glad you enjoyed.
Re. Illegal
20th Sep 2018 7:26pm
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Thank you, Sun, for enjoying my write. But since I don’t know you in that way, I can only hazard a guess why you like my piece so much. I hope you’ll let me know, I’d love to know!
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21st Sep 2018 8:47am
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Re. Illegal
20th Sep 2018 10:28pm
Holy Duck, step aside, there’s a five alarm fire in my ripped jeans.
Damn this gonna shred...shoulda got a mani yesterday.
Oh well, in your honor JP I will draw blood
haha rad read
Damn this gonna shred...shoulda got a mani yesterday.
Oh well, in your honor JP I will draw blood
haha rad read
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Re: Re. Illegal
21st Sep 2018 2:51am
lol! Well hello, dear BBP, and thanks for your zippy words of humorous appreciation & enjoyment. I really am very pleased.
Duck!🦆
Duck!🦆
Re. Illegal
21st Sep 2018 2:09am
wow you've really painted a great story
with this erotic piece
awesome
with this erotic piece
awesome
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Hello, Poet, it’s nice to see you again. And thank you for your appreciation & embrace of my little ode. Your comments/ thoughts are always a pleasure to receive.
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Thank you oo oo Oooh, fireworks!💥
Mmm, the full treatment I feel, er, I mean (to) see!
💫😳 🤩⚡️🤯✨😑💦🤤
Mmm, the full treatment I feel, er, I mean (to) see!
💫😳 🤩⚡️🤯✨😑💦🤤
Re. Illegal
21st Sep 2018 6:12pm
Very well written.... I do believe everyone loves oral, it is so quick and easy to maneuver when in a tight jam, plus its just all the more fun when your can't have sex, its almost the best way to release...
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Re: Re. Illegal
21st Sep 2018 6:20pm
Hi Joe, and thanks for the gems. I’m pleased you like my ink.
And welcome to the Deep!
And welcome to the Deep!
Re: Re. Illegal
21st Sep 2018 6:30pm
thanx may be you can come around my way and have a visit.... my door is always open
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Re. Illegal
25th Sep 2018 3:00am
Read this in competition; you’ve certainly put a lot of raw emotion and sensation on display, but I particularly enjoy how you keep a steady and balanced mix of direct sexual reference and vivid metaphors to keep the mind and senses moving bile reading. Consider my blood warmed
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25th Sep 2018 4:14am
Well hello Taurus, it’s been a little while, but those are generous words, and I thank you for stopping in for a read. Glad my ink was to your liking.
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25th Sep 2018 4:17am
Been finishing the rough draft of my novel (just done this weekend!), so now I’m back to ruffle feathers and enjoy the words. Thanks for the welcome, Jade. Very happy to see you’re still spreading said ink so skillfully
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26th Sep 2018 11:40pm
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Re: Re. Illegal
26th Sep 2018 11:45pm
Why thank you most graciously, dear Adam, for feeling the words with such grasping appreciation.
Re. Illegal
28th Sep 2018 3:13pm
"Fuck, not the way we are & how we flex."
If only i could flex in anyway ill b in a circus im aroused i love it
If only i could flex in anyway ill b in a circus im aroused i love it
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12th Oct 2018 10:10pm
Er, embarrassed to admit it but you distracted me from my syllable count ... mmm 'I don't care I don't care I don't care' very much resonated with me by the time I got to this part of the poem.
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12th Oct 2018 10:33pm
Ah thank you so much for coming to read & express. High praise indeed from a reader.
Just toss your syllable count out the window when it comes to reading mine. I’ve got it covered, so relax and drink in my writes without the distraction. Just leave the driving to me.🚗
Just toss your syllable count out the window when it comes to reading mine. I’ve got it covered, so relax and drink in my writes without the distraction. Just leave the driving to me.🚗
Re. Illegal
13th Nov 2018 2:57am
As an aficionado of the pleasures you bring to life through words, I can say you really made me feel again the magic of tongue-twisting in intimacy. You write with your signature style which surpasses ordinary erotica into the realm of an inescapable sexual artistry.
XoXo
John
XoXo
John
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