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Secure
Golden Sol has hidden
From an angry purple-orange morn
Revealing feelings now unbidden
A love has died, but who will mourn?
He has not called
She has not spoken
Where they were, once, both enthralled
Now both of them heartbroken
Over oaths they have dissolved
Anger, like a moss, grows thick
in the damp and shade
A hearty cure for those lovesick
At least, that’s what’s displayed
They keep their wounds out of the light
Sunlight will not cure
A better treatment, dry and dark
Cold, but quite secure
Published 11th Sep 2018
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11th Sep 2018 9:24pm
The title contradicts the theme of your poem, yet I think that adds to the sense of illusion that the two lovers had of their relationship, only for reality to shatter their mirror and leave both of them disappointed and heartbroken. In a sense, how they were and how they are now is like looking at two sides of a mirror. I like the symbolism and the imagery you've created.
Well done, and good luck in the competition!
Well done, and good luck in the competition!
12th Sep 2018 3:31am
12th Sep 2018 9:38pm
This is my favorite of yours, Reggie. I can only echo LunasChild, and put this on my RL. I'm still half asleep so I need more coffee before I can attempt a coherent analysis. Meanwhile, excellent job!
12th Sep 2018 11:08pm
Captures well how time can dull the fire ... in favour of (as you say) being "quite secure". Great write.
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