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in the garden of hope
the day ache pear trees
delicate flavor in the garden
you saw me there collecting forget me nots
ethereal beauty with a shy smile
quietly you watched
you didn't want to disturb me
I sang a sad hymn so melodic and lovely...
it hurt your heart to listen
but you couldn't turn away
he loves me, he loves me not I recited
with a pensive look on my face
you wanted to hold me then
I heard your stirrings
looked up and saw you through the trees
blushing wildly...
someone witnessed my innocence
upon silent feet you approach
saying malady I didn't mean to frighten you
I look down still caught in my reverie
whisper I saw you in a dream
I reach out to touch you
and then pull away
afraid of waking from my vision
tears gently roll down my face
you take me in your arms
hush now beautiful, I'm real
we kiss, I'm in heaven for a moment
then my eyes open...
I awaken to find you're gone
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Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 2:49pm
Wonderful soothing write ... till the killer last line ... beautiful ...
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Re: Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 2:54pm
thank you beautiful Dragonfly yeah sigh it was all a dream... I'm happy you found it soothing as I did while writing it ✨
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 3:35pm
Re: Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 3:36pm
Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 4:53pm
A Greek myth dream...it actually does remind me of a story I read once about Artemis, bathing in a pond and being watched; this was lovely and serene
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Re: Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 4:54pm
thank you dearest Taurus for sharing your beautiful vision of this write... I'm happy you found it to be pleasing 💕
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 4:59pm
Re: Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 5:01pm
thank you graciously dearest Lawrence you brought me smiles this morning 🌹
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. in the garden of hope
8th Sep 2018 7:34pm
A wonderfully sweet and tender write, Crim. I would say "dreamlike," but that's pretty clear from that gentle surprise of a last line. And being "in heaven for a moment." I hope you make it there for all eternity.
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Re: Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 5:09am
thank you graciously dearest Sir Crow yes sigh a dream ✨
so happy this one touched you...
love Crim
so happy this one touched you...
love Crim
Re. in the garden of hope
Anonymous
8th Sep 2018 8:06pm
Excellent theme... The whole wilderness... The harsh lonliness and brief joy...all blended beautifully
Great work Brenda
Always:)
Great work Brenda
Always:)
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Re: Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 5:10am
Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 00:01am
Beautiful Crim...dreams are like that. Recently I'm finding it harder to distinguish dreams
from reality.
Dark Sun.
from reality.
Dark Sun.
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Re: Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 5:11am
thank you graciously dearest Dark Sun I feel you but dreams can be a good thing ❤
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Crim
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Crim
Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 4:24am
"collecting forget me nots" > you got me there :-)
Such a dreamy poem... love the innocent feel it has, perfect choice of picture.
The "he loves me, he loves me not" brought back some memories, we do that with daisies... is that the same in America? (just wondering)
Really enjoyed this one, beautiful Brenda
Love, Duende
Such a dreamy poem... love the innocent feel it has, perfect choice of picture.
The "he loves me, he loves me not" brought back some memories, we do that with daisies... is that the same in America? (just wondering)
Really enjoyed this one, beautiful Brenda
Love, Duende
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Re: Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 5:07am
thank you beautiful Duende for the love on this write yes daisies here too 😊 I just thought a forget me not would mean he would remember me giggles...
you brought me smiles tonight I deeply appreciate you...
love you lady 💕
love Brenda
you brought me smiles tonight I deeply appreciate you...
love you lady 💕
love Brenda
Re: Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 5:21am
This poem needed forget me nots!
I'm still in awe... daisies and forget me nots :-)
(am afraid not much more comes out of me atm, lol)
Appreciate and love you too, lady 💕
Love, Duende
I'm still in awe... daisies and forget me nots :-)
(am afraid not much more comes out of me atm, lol)
Appreciate and love you too, lady 💕
Love, Duende
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9th Sep 2018 5:41am
Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 5:03am
That is so amazingly beautiful. I really liked liked that shit! I like all your shit lol but this one somehow just resonates with me. Thank you
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Re: Re. in the garden of hope
9th Sep 2018 5:08am
thank you graciously dearest Miseryomy I'm so happy this one moved you 🌹
love Crim
love Crim