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Freedom
Standing on the edge of moonlight water,
Staring into her reflection
The truth unfolds
Behind evergreen eyes,
There is night
Beneath painted smiles
There is painful silence
Beyond endless happiness
There is an ominous truth,
Dancing deep within
She finds her freedom in the wind
Crimson tears start to fall,
Melting away obligatory optimism
Shedding away false light
Releasing her soul,
Black as night
Published 8th Aug 2018
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8th Aug 2018 10:44am
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8th Aug 2018 9:09pm
"...obligatory optimism", indeed. I sneer when someone tells me to put on a happy face. Love this poem, particularly the power of the last lines. Fine work in its entirety.
16th Jan 2023 2:16am
There is an honesty to the voice that is engaging, syllabic flow is smooth, the cadence doesn't feel forced. I think it's well rendered.
