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the day was a two dollar whore
with cheap lipstick
smudged all over her face
from giving blowjobs to the johns of the night
she kept to the shadows
lest any respectable person see her
in her shame she wallowed
wore it like a vagrant's suit
carrying the filth of her acts
inside her soul
where they couldn't be seen
still she reeked of it
she could hear the gossip
as she walked through town
with words that cut steel
she spit back her venom
while they looked at her
like she was a madwoman
and in her sin she was
all that they believed
then the day curled in on herself in defeat
and was blown away
just another piece of trash
littering these city streets
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6th Aug 2018 1:39pm
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Anonymous
6th Aug 2018 1:48pm
Sweet hell, this is brilliant, beautiful Dark Angel! I agree with PoetSpeak, that last stanza is phenomenal. I love you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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6th Aug 2018 1:58pm
thank you graciously beautiful Willow I love that you loved this write...
I love you :)
love Brenda
I love you :)
love Brenda
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6th Aug 2018 1:49pm
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6th Aug 2018 1:59pm
thank you graciously dearest Tim for getting what this poem is about...
love Brenda
love Brenda
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6th Aug 2018 2:13pm
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6th Aug 2018 2:15pm
thank you Bender I hate that you could relate to this feeling of being ridiculed and feeling useless... I love what you said about being another person's treasure...
I deeply appreciate that you read and took the time to comment...
love Crim
I deeply appreciate that you read and took the time to comment...
love Crim
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Anonymous
6th Aug 2018 3:23pm
Sometimes Life can be a real whore. Individuals have their flaws, but no one has the right to judge another, as we all have, one way or another, prostituted ourselves at some point in life. An old saying says: " The bigger the sin, bigger is the forgiveness"! I truly believe that situations are not always in our control. I love the way you hit it hard in the closing. Truly beautiful conclusion." then the day curled in on herself in defeat and was blown away just another piece of trash
littering these city streets". You are truly great my poetess. hugs J.
littering these city streets". You are truly great my poetess. hugs J.
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6th Aug 2018 3:27pm
thank you dearest Juvenalis for such a beautiful comment...thankfully the whore was only a metaphor and describing how I felt today... I love that you loved the ending it is telling also of how I sometimes feel...
love & hugs...
Brenda
love & hugs...
Brenda
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Anonymous
6th Aug 2018 3:37pm
Dear one,I know it was a metaphor, but life, for me, is a whore. Good people suffer, bad rejoice and are happy. Let's take it as it comes. hugs, sweet one. J
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6th Aug 2018 3:44pm
oh I get you yes indeed life is a whore at times you're right we do suffer needlessly it seems but times when my pain has moved someone or allowed them to feel not so alone I feel it may be worth it..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
6th Aug 2018 3:47pm
Exactly what your words do to my soul. You are a great poetess. Xx J
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6th Aug 2018 3:54pm
thank you dearest Juvenalis most graciously as are you beautiful soul...
love & hugs...
Brenda
love & hugs...
Brenda
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6th Aug 2018 6:08pm
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6th Aug 2018 6:09pm
thank you graciously dearest Sir Crow so happy you took this one home with you I really like it for it's expression too :)
love Crim
love Crim
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6th Aug 2018 6:51pm
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6th Aug 2018 6:54pm
thank you graciously dearest RJM metaphorically speaking the day is me how i'm feeling about today...
I spoke in second person in a way because I didn't want to admit to feeling bad today this morning...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts and reading...
love Crim
I spoke in second person in a way because I didn't want to admit to feeling bad today this morning...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts and reading...
love Crim
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6th Aug 2018 6:58pm
Our minds' can give us the greatest pleasures and deepest despair. I hope that you can garner some enjoyment amidst your misery and seize some beauty in today.
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6th Aug 2018 7:00pm
since I first wrote this poem I have dearest RJM.. just spending time with you poets today has given me much pleasure :) thank you for reminding me about the beauty of the day...
love Crim
love Crim
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6th Aug 2018 11:46pm
Is this a comment on a particular place? eg New York? Or on how depression can make you feel judged, shameful and used? Because the imagery is very evocative and effective... I don't understand the imagery of the vagrant suit. If it is a formal suit, or suit of armour, is it not an oxymoron? This is a good way to describe what it's like to be a cutter...
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6th Aug 2018 11:50pm
thank you for reading and commenting it's about feeling worthless and the vagrant suit is about feeling dirty out there on the streets exposed...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts and the comment welcome to du...
love Crim
I deeply appreciate your thoughts and the comment welcome to du...
love Crim
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7th Aug 2018 7:48pm
I loved the composition of this piece, you personified those days excellently.
I've had those days also, and they truly suck.
Hope they're few and far between for you as well
Nicely done, dear poetess.
I've had those days also, and they truly suck.
Hope they're few and far between for you as well
Nicely done, dear poetess.
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7th Aug 2018 7:54pm