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gun in the mouth

gun in the mouth
december 2hd, 2009

I want to taste the gun metal on my tongue
this phallic weapon
this fellatial suicide
climaxing a blast of gun powder and a bullet
ripping my life from my body in an instant
watching the life-flash in the minds eye
everything I knew and was
and all that could have been and ever was
in a white light of layered experience
a moment that moves in slow-motion
dragging on a millisecond of everything
across the seams of eternity
no more questions
no more pain
no more wanting upon empty rib cage
and then the light burns out
the center of my mortal being sprayed on the wall behind me
separate from life
with not even enough time to say goodbye

Written by noonenothingnone

(nathan i)

Published 24th Dec 2009

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Anonymous

24th Dec 2009 5:47pm

Fast becoming a firm fan of your work, Nathan. The darkness and the unashamedly brutal nature of your language and themes startles, and I get the impression that you're writing from genuine feeling, as opposed to some mere adolescent desire to shock (though shock you most certainly do!) The comparison of suicide by gun to fellatio was inspired.

noonenothingnone (nathan i)

24th Dec 2009 5:57pm

glad you dig my stuff.. I do write from a place of genuine feeling.. usually.. I like to shock or get any emotion I possibly can from the reader depending on subject matter.. I'm glad you think I've accomplished this.. yes a bit of homosexual reference in the fellatio/suicide.. I had to put myself in that place not by genuine feeling but by a sort of acting.. but I think it worked..