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Not Any More
quatern
Je ne veux plus de ton amour,
I lost the fire of your pursuit!
Burned by delusions of grandeur,
My good name, now in disrepute!
I broke the grip of passion’s chain,
Je ne veux plus de ton amour!
My will was spent to end your reign.
Now watch me walking out the door.
I’ve silenced you, my raconteur,
In solitude, I found release.
Je ne veux plus de ton amour,
A temporary, secret peace!
Now, drink the final parting glass,
I swear to love you nevermore!
Return to your own social class!
Je ne veux plus de ton amour!
Je ne veux plus de ton amour,
I lost the fire of your pursuit!
Burned by delusions of grandeur,
My good name, now in disrepute!
I broke the grip of passion’s chain,
Je ne veux plus de ton amour!
My will was spent to end your reign.
Now watch me walking out the door.
I’ve silenced you, my raconteur,
In solitude, I found release.
Je ne veux plus de ton amour,
A temporary, secret peace!
Now, drink the final parting glass,
I swear to love you nevermore!
Return to your own social class!
Je ne veux plus de ton amour!
Published 11th Jul 2018
| Edited 21st Aug 2019
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Anonymous
11th Jul 2018 1:43pm
that is quite the breakup poem!
the form is well executed and the refrain, quite catchy. well done.
the form is well executed and the refrain, quite catchy. well done.
11th Jul 2018 2:18pm
11th Jul 2018 1:57pm
19th Jul 2018 6:12am
I like this a lot!
And only because you ask for honest critique, if you permit a bit of French tuning, I think you want :
Je ne veux plus de ton amour
Which translates to ‘I don’t want your love anymore’ or ‘i no longer want your love’ in quite a more beautiful way
‘Je ne voulais plus ton amour’ makes for a strange, passive tense, translating to ‘I didnt want your love anymore’ or ‘I no longer wanted your love’.
Didn’t stop me from enjoying it completely! :)
And only because you ask for honest critique, if you permit a bit of French tuning, I think you want :
Je ne veux plus de ton amour
Which translates to ‘I don’t want your love anymore’ or ‘i no longer want your love’ in quite a more beautiful way
‘Je ne voulais plus ton amour’ makes for a strange, passive tense, translating to ‘I didnt want your love anymore’ or ‘I no longer wanted your love’.
Didn’t stop me from enjoying it completely! :)
19th Jul 2018 2:13pm
1st Mar 2019 10:04pm
The poem came up in the featured poems section ... there's a lot to admire. A quatrain in iambic tetrameter with an abab rhyme scheme in each stanza. Best of all ... not one syllable out of place. Currently there's a war being fought between my admiration and envy ...
2nd Mar 2019 1:50am
