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Sandy Shore
We met along the sandy shore
your sparkling blue I did adore
that dreamy look I didn't doubt
waves rushing in then rushing out
I wonder what life had in store
we met along the sandy shore
secrets shared under stars of bright
a gleaming hope throughout the night
The sun arose before we knew
you kissing me, I kissing you
we met along the sandy shore
secluded spots we both explore
Holding close as desire craves
we're overcome by crashing waves
romantic scenes one can't ignore
we met along the sandy shore
your sparkling blue I did adore
that dreamy look I didn't doubt
waves rushing in then rushing out
I wonder what life had in store
we met along the sandy shore
secrets shared under stars of bright
a gleaming hope throughout the night
The sun arose before we knew
you kissing me, I kissing you
we met along the sandy shore
secluded spots we both explore
Holding close as desire craves
we're overcome by crashing waves
romantic scenes one can't ignore
we met along the sandy shore
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10th Jul 2018 1:34pm
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10th Jul 2018 1:45pm
I was doing similar with the ocean on a meditative write..
it's beautiful...
it's beautiful...
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10th Jul 2018 2:48pm
I love the way you play with the line "We met along the sandy shore", in which it gives something new for poem formation.
Is it your new experiment?
I love it definitely.
love
Jasmine
Is it your new experiment?
I love it definitely.
love
Jasmine
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10th Jul 2018 2:53pm
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10th Jul 2018 5:30pm
Hi there Tim, I gotta tell you, you are quite a good writer smooth too. I always enjoy a poem i don't have to work to read. You definitely have chops, I love your choice of words you play with them well..
Zazz :)
Zazz :)
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Re. Sandy Shore
10th Jul 2018 6:43pm
Tim, this actually reminds me of some of the Summer inspired, hard-to-get-outta-your-head, songs that seem to be spawned every year. I remember some of the Spanish ones like "No Tengo Dinero" and "Vamos a lsa Playa." Nice romantic piece. Bravo!
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Anonymous
10th Jul 2018 6:50pm
i actually came down here to say something similar! though, i was thinking more like 'summer loving' from the musical Grease.
the refrain is catchy with that alteration at the end. well done with the form!
the refrain is catchy with that alteration at the end. well done with the form!
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10th Jul 2018 7:02pm
Thanks GW...I loved the catchy tunes...they always left you with a positive vibes.
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Not only the sweetest sentiment portrayed but written exquisitely and tied together so perfectly, where the ending met right back at the beginning!
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Anonymous
11th Jul 2018 3:21pm
Fabulous entry! Big smiles with this one. :-)
...Willow
...Willow
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Anonymous
16th Jul 2018 00:52am
Just breathtakingly perfect Tim
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