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Before I Fall
Most mornings are mundane
a routine struggle to present
a pumped up state of affairs
to an already exasperated air
[but this time it's different]
soft breezes blow across my pillow
brushing smiles upon my skin
my eyes have been awakened
as comfort keeps crawling in
sun kisses dangle off my prism
and for once I can finally breathe
hopeful happens upon reason
drifting in every gaze you see
don't change past imperfections
splashed about your walls
life's too short for wasting
just catch me before I fall
a routine struggle to present
a pumped up state of affairs
to an already exasperated air
[but this time it's different]
soft breezes blow across my pillow
brushing smiles upon my skin
my eyes have been awakened
as comfort keeps crawling in
sun kisses dangle off my prism
and for once I can finally breathe
hopeful happens upon reason
drifting in every gaze you see
don't change past imperfections
splashed about your walls
life's too short for wasting
just catch me before I fall
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Re. Before I Fall
7th Jul 2018 12:54pm
I enjoyed your quatrain - lovely from, rhyming scheme and interesting content - bravo
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Re. Before I Fall
7th Jul 2018 1:21pm
Re. Before I Fall
7th Jul 2018 11:13pm
sometimes I forget what powerful writer you can be
you've outdone yourself
you've outdone yourself
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8th Jul 2018 3:46am
Re. Before I Fall
7th Jul 2018 11:21pm
I too really really like this one ... great flow and cadence ... the quatrain structure is perfect for this ...
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Re. Before I Fall
8th Jul 2018 4:24am
Re. Before I Fall
Anonymous
11th Jul 2018 3:15pm
The line in italics and the last line tie perfectly together. They pretty much solidify everything else into perfect expression. Very nice!
...Willow
...Willow
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16th Jul 2018 5:08am
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