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forever pantomimes a perennial melancholy, silhouetted blackbird of the rustic fence & red suns
#convoluted geometries
tempestuous matrices
in enervating tangential faceoffs
their bombastic munitions
in poetically grilled curvatures
beam coppery mawkish
with trapped metal moth
intersections
crossed unto clotted alloys
glassine monasteries in hymns
calmly smelt an insouciant peace
from the splashed lurid reds
of the timorous minds
in descried opacities
‘thusly cometh a full circle’
its orbiting cometic warriors
of unshakeable realizations
confront the highly risible
perpendicular armies
in unbending tyrannies
#poetic culminations
sawdust skins dancing
from brittle breakdowns
drawn beyond boundaries
still some stuck over the beneath
stretch of frozen remoteness
fettered in an unease
of a volcanic silence
a racing dying sepia heart
in a peculiarly blending
‘pull n push’ portmanteau
heaves unbearably
in stonewalled grindings
and dreamless streaming….
from deathly stinging
countless nights
an unputdownable
conflagration
of scalding emptiness
over vaguely stretched, an
undemanding darkness
bound in fallible filmy fragilities
thinning furthermore
towards hungrily fimbriating
rhapsodies, a lively
brokenness never
in departure from the slightest
hit & turns of hope in the lights
sapless noonish flesh, deserted
to duneless tunes, the dryly
wayward monsoonal blows
slowly wholly inching in
for a drenching reversal of an
expression, in mystified verses
Published 12th Jun 2018
Author's Note
written for 'in a word (or 2)' comp, a bit late of the deadline though. ah dear host, feel free to ignore it if time's up :(
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12th Jun 2018 8:22pm
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13th Jun 2018 5:32pm
This puts most poetry to shame, multilayered dimensional that leaves me in awe not only at your ability as an artist but a mind that we're privileged to see the depth and language in describing the mechanics.
Both parts of the poem become reflections of each other in such a way that brings it to circle, i definitely need to include it in my list to learn much from this beauty.
Both parts of the poem become reflections of each other in such a way that brings it to circle, i definitely need to include it in my list to learn much from this beauty.
14th Jun 2018 7:06pm
Incredible intricacy and elemental power in your writes, which are genius and my mind struggles to comprehend, but it's worth the effort.
Daniel
Daniel
15th Jun 2018 4:54am
This stanza is so well crafted, an example of your unique descriptive abilities,
' a racing dying sepia heart
in a peculiarly blending
‘pull n push’ portmanteau
heaves unbearably
in stonewalled grindings
and dreamless streaming….
from deathly stinging
countless nights '
An excellent snapshot, palpable.
' a racing dying sepia heart
in a peculiarly blending
‘pull n push’ portmanteau
heaves unbearably
in stonewalled grindings
and dreamless streaming….
from deathly stinging
countless nights '
An excellent snapshot, palpable.
16th Jun 2018 7:04am
your poem's is very hard to understand, because some words have up to five meanings, like matrices the list goes on.
there is no punctuation,
if you read shakespeare or any good poet they keep simple, shamus henry, used simple words,
Longfellow spoke in simple words in Hiawatha, the only long word was Kabibonokka, an Indian tribe
there is no punctuation,
if you read shakespeare or any good poet they keep simple, shamus henry, used simple words,
Longfellow spoke in simple words in Hiawatha, the only long word was Kabibonokka, an Indian tribe
16th Jun 2018 7:38am
'your poem's is very hard to understand' ..hmm, such is life love truth n all such sublteties...its a beautiful chaos ..n not an equation or theorem to be solved ...for me, capturing the strongly felt things amidst all the deeply felt chaos.. is poetry...it reveals( in varifold layers) n syncs wondrously with a predisposed soul ...in such ecstatic elevations..... the feel n sync are the key, soulful vigour is'the' lifeline than the mere skindeepish rigours of word choices, punctuations, forms etc etc etc of poetry. formlessness abstractions is the essence of art.. like breaths . this is my poetic journey , thats i hazily perceive to be deepeningly mystical ..
each poem/ poet are unique n there need not be any comparison or a generalistic/ hard n fast standards to be followed in poetry.. I defy. I am undefined. that's my poetry for you..i do read n get influenced by peers n classic poets..but the outcomes come in my own way..not a replica of others or greats.
I really appreciate your time n words on this space, i could feel what you say, but you have what i needed to say on this as abv.
each poem/ poet are unique n there need not be any comparison or a generalistic/ hard n fast standards to be followed in poetry.. I defy. I am undefined. that's my poetry for you..i do read n get influenced by peers n classic poets..but the outcomes come in my own way..not a replica of others or greats.
I really appreciate your time n words on this space, i could feel what you say, but you have what i needed to say on this as abv.
6th Dec 2018 3:33am
