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Loss
Humming birds flitter
desolate garden spaces
hovering
hungry
barren, dull places
Grand orchestra assembled
vacant music hall
inspiration
unheard
muted chords fall
Evening stars dimmed
forming dark cloud
fading
smothered
not shimmering proud
Mournful child cries
tragic maternal death
grieving
struggling
never catching breath
desolate garden spaces
hovering
hungry
barren, dull places
Grand orchestra assembled
vacant music hall
inspiration
unheard
muted chords fall
Evening stars dimmed
forming dark cloud
fading
smothered
not shimmering proud
Mournful child cries
tragic maternal death
grieving
struggling
never catching breath
Published 9th Jun 2018
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9th Jun 2018 12:29pm
9th Jun 2018 12:53pm
Thanks for the read and taking the time to comment. Much appreciated dear friend.
9th Jun 2018 12:38pm
9th Jun 2018 12:55pm
I find when suffering loss, much that is beautiful is dulled. Thanks for your response lovely.
9th Jun 2018 2:39pm
dearest Mel so much sorrow in this beautifully crafted poem
I could feel the progression and build up grief within it..
beautiful..
love Crim
I could feel the progression and build up grief within it..
beautiful..
love Crim
9th Jun 2018 3:55pm
Thank you lovely Crim. I wasn't sure how well the sorrow would come across.
Bless
Bless
9th Jun 2018 3:57pm
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26th Jun 2018 00:34am
I just love the subtlety in this poignant poem Mel...noting overstated...excellent.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
2nd Jul 2018 10:16pm
15th Jul 2018 2:40am
oh boy! this was an awesome write, I read it out loud about 5 times. By the forth time it had me crying, especially the last stanza :-)))
top drawer stuff :-)))))))))))))
top drawer stuff :-)))))))))))))
16th Jul 2018 8:27pm
I am honoured by RL David. Thank you! Sorry it brought tears but hope they were healing:) xx
Mel
Mel
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