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the season of goodbye
"tell me wanderer of the coming summer
as you walk through what's left of spring
does he whisper of a passion so rare
emblazoned on the flesh of a lover
his power to scorch with the lust of another?"
"while the flowers fade
vibrant shades turn brown
and then are blown away
will it also be with a love
just a passing season?"
"tell me what you see
as you walk through the valley
within the wisdom you've gathered
let us wrestle with the future"
"I know you fear eternal winter
as the last sun sets on your heart
but surely you knew
as the sun fled the landscape
that your time was growing short"
"tell me wanderer
are you prepared for the chill
of a love grown cold
have you prepared your heart...
for his last I love you?"
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Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 8:49pm
Thoughtful write
Lots to pick over with each stanza
Enjoy reading you Crim xoxo
Lots to pick over with each stanza
Enjoy reading you Crim xoxo
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 9:23pm
Re. the season of goodbye
Anonymous
29th May 2018 8:56pm
Your muse is full of deep thoughts and visions today, my beautiful Dark Angel. Are we ever ready for that final goodbye? Beautiful poetry. I love you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 9:24pm
thank you beautiful Willow could just be sadness speaking..
I love you..
love Brenda
I love you..
love Brenda
Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 9:00pm
Re: Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 9:24pm
Re. the season of goodbye
Anonymous
29th May 2018 9:27pm
What sadness is in your voice today. I sense pain and desolation. Your words, tremendously beautiful, swell the heart.
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 9:29pm
thank you dearest Juvenalis for such a loving and beautiful comment.. yes sigh I am sad today..
love Crim
love Crim
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 9:51pm
thank you dearest John for feeling this write and for a beautifully optimistic outlook..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 11:08pm
""tell me what you see
as you walk through the valley
within the wisdom you've gathered
let us wrestle with the future"
"I know you fear eternal winter
as the last sun sets on your heart
but surely you knew
as the sun fled the landscape
that your time was growing short"
wonderful my dearest...this has a transporting feeling...a narration by you in my head as I read...such smooth flow...my eyes could make love to your words...
love
Jeff
as you walk through the valley
within the wisdom you've gathered
let us wrestle with the future"
"I know you fear eternal winter
as the last sun sets on your heart
but surely you knew
as the sun fled the landscape
that your time was growing short"
wonderful my dearest...this has a transporting feeling...a narration by you in my head as I read...such smooth flow...my eyes could make love to your words...
love
Jeff
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
29th May 2018 11:29pm
Re. the season of goodbye
30th May 2018 1:43am
Heartbreaking but beautiful, Lady Crim, well thought out and even better written. Hopefully that "I love you" won't be the last. I certainly love this, and you.
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
30th May 2018 5:08am
thank you dearest Sir Crow for such a loving comment.. I hope so too..
love Crim
love Crim
Re: Re. the season of goodbye
30th May 2018 5:08am
Re. the season of goodbye
Anonymous
31st May 2018 3:23am
My love I know you well enough to feel who the she and he is within this heartfelt ink....his last I love you would not spoken unless being heard within his last breath...tell her I said so...and when you do, let her feel my arms wrapped around her tightly while hearing me whisper “you are worthy...”
I love you passionately, deeply
Xoxo always and forever Taryn
I love you passionately, deeply
Xoxo always and forever Taryn
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
4th Jun 2018 5:38am
thank you my love yes you do indeed know me it's just the writing out of a fear I hold close to my chest if I am unable to be what is needed..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
Re. the season of goodbye
Anonymous
1st Jun 2018 10:19pm
You are a true poetess.......Brenda your ink spills heartbreakingly beautiful, it is a very relatable write and I think that people do relate will get as much out of it hopefully as much as you did scribing it.
big loves
Ben x
big loves
Ben x
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
4th Jun 2018 5:39am
aw thank you graciously dearest Ben for seeing my truths revealed in ink I try to be fearless uncovering even the ugliest parts of my soul..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. the season of goodbye
6th Jun 2018 10:49pm
This aches my heart, so of course I had to read it again. Our suffering is a barometer that lets us know we are alive. We watch the sun set in still motion, too impatient to watch that drowsy eye fall, and as we fritter away each moment, lament it's loss. Beautiful ink.
Daniel
Daniel
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Re: Re. the season of goodbye
9th Jun 2018 5:06am
thank you dearest Christian for feeling the emotion of this write.. I deeply appreciate your insight and thoughts on this..
love Brenda
love Brenda