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Scars
Scars on my heart
From where i was torn apart
By the shady ass bitch
who was heartless from the start
I gave everything to you girl
I told you that you were my world
But now my world is shattered
You left me broken and battered...
I'm better off without you
I knew that while i was with you
Yet i don't understand why i ignored that simple Truth
It's kinda peaceful without your bitching
and getting out on my own
But i still long for your love
because at least you i could call my own
From where i was torn apart
By the shady ass bitch
who was heartless from the start
I gave everything to you girl
I told you that you were my world
But now my world is shattered
You left me broken and battered...
I'm better off without you
I knew that while i was with you
Yet i don't understand why i ignored that simple Truth
It's kinda peaceful without your bitching
and getting out on my own
But i still long for your love
because at least you i could call my own
Published 12th Oct 2011
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13th Oct 2011 3:53pm
nice job keep it coming, not to be mean but it could use a little more emotion
13th Oct 2011 9:12pm
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26th Oct 2011 2:49am
Keep working at it.
4th Nov 2011 2:39am
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21st Dec 2011 3:55pm
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22nd Dec 2011 1:20am
25th Dec 2011 6:38pm
gud bt require a little bit more emotion,pain....i hope in near future...i will see smthing more!!!
8th Mar 2012 2:31am
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12th Mar 2012 4:13am
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12th Mar 2012 4:27am
When a man can express himself so freely about a subject most wont touch its beautiful. I am proud of you and kinda turned on.. Nice job!! And to think you didnt even have to gag her..
14th Mar 2012 9:20am
Anonymous
5th Apr 2012 4:05pm
You rapped it well-especially in saying you knew the whole time-I feel you there-and sometimes it's the lack of certain emotion and presence of others-that speaks the authors heart and intention-I love it and would not edit. Peace, Miki
7th Apr 2012 00:07am
I read all four of your poems and you should keep sharing your thoughts because it different and unique god bless.
19th Apr 2012 11:35pm
29th May 2012 2:23pm
A poem I can relate to. It's always nice when a man can describe his inner feelings, very nicely done!
23rd Jun 2012 8:08pm
I usually like reading everything you submit because you just get to the point and you don't candy coat anything really. I like that you keep it for real. Thank you for sharing.
12th Jul 2012 1:26am
