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Soft Shades Of Blue
Scattered the droplets splay
a sheen not really seen
soft shades of blue filter
from the form that is you
azure streaks of summertime bliss
electrifying my sky
a mere twining in your eye
accentuates and erupts
feining the sun
I've come undone
as the strings untie
the past
waves wash over our fears
bravely admonished to lie near
trailing footprints traverse
holding on to an outstreched hand
farther never felt so close
a sheen not really seen
soft shades of blue filter
from the form that is you
azure streaks of summertime bliss
electrifying my sky
a mere twining in your eye
accentuates and erupts
feining the sun
I've come undone
as the strings untie
the past
waves wash over our fears
bravely admonished to lie near
trailing footprints traverse
holding on to an outstreched hand
farther never felt so close
Published 17th Apr 2018
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Anonymous
17th Apr 2018 4:30pm
"I've come undone
as the strings untie
the past"
That is the most amazing metaphor I've seen recently. The unraveling...brilliant, my friend
...Willow
as the strings untie
the past"
That is the most amazing metaphor I've seen recently. The unraveling...brilliant, my friend
...Willow
17th Apr 2018 4:40pm
Anonymous
17th Apr 2018 5:48pm
So serene is this Tim. Took me to my favourite place. Gorgeous write.
17th Apr 2018 5:56pm
Thank you Sophie. The serenity of the beach can be so calming and inspiring. 🙂
17th Apr 2018 7:12pm
Beautiful write through and through Tim .
"a mere twining in your eye
accentuates and erupts
feigning the sun "
This stanza especially stood out to me . Really captivates the boundless expression of beauty you portray in your poetry . Fantastic job .
"a mere twining in your eye
accentuates and erupts
feigning the sun "
This stanza especially stood out to me . Really captivates the boundless expression of beauty you portray in your poetry . Fantastic job .
17th Apr 2018 7:15pm
18th Apr 2018 00:52am
I believe everyone who has already commented, summed up everything I could say. Wonderful use of words and imagery.
18th Apr 2018 1:04am
Anonymous
- Edited 26th May 2018 6:48pm
19th Apr 2018 2:06am
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19th Apr 2018 4:24am
